a good idea but its very "i am stating this in the strictest way possible so i can get my message across".

case and point: "I hate being so weak" He slumped his shoulders at his weakness.

or

"wow Kagome's the clostest friend i've had in a long-" (that was just OOC)

try to work on writing smoother, imagine watching a show and hearing speak the words you're writing and think "would they really say that?"

I like how there wasn't any true plot to this story, yet it was relevant to the real storyline. And fluffy! :D Good job.

Nice fic nice song nuf said

aW

I have liked it,maybe a little short :)

since i like da "the Hell Song", i read dis.sho wut if da song didn't match da story?da music video 2 dis is funnay!did u c it?anyway, u should c it.

Very good! Very Creative! I never would have thought of that but its fits in perfectly! I love summ41!

Umm. it new moon not full moon. Other than that, it was a great fic. Great emotion, but maybe you could have spent more time describing the memories. More detail.

It was sweet and done to my favorite song. I love it!

This is a cute story on Inuyasha's reflections and thoughts, and I like how you displayed his emotions to the readers. For a first, this one is alright. Keep writing!

One point, though: Inuyasha turns human on the night of the new moon, not the full moon.

oh, I thought it was pretty good for your first fic! keep up the good work, and I hope to hear some more stories soon ^_^