Nice... Very nice. Cunning of you, HDS. Never realised "Rigel" was Antares until I put together the "soon to be a married man," "looking different from brothers", "fleeter", "cargo", "music and singing", and the rest of them. Oh, and the admission never hurt. :P

Raargh! More UC Gundam goodness.

What more do you want me to say?

The way this story interconnects with your other work reminds me of the original UC timeline.

In case my 'flu addled rambling is a bit unclear, please consider this a positive review, and my opinion is that you need to continue writing UC Gundam stories.

kishira, so you _do_ actually like my work too, eh? ^_^

I personally liked it despite its length (note- most of it was written by HDS. There's a reason why Man in the Hat and Forgotten Fleet Studios are only "in cooperation" of Abyssal Lasombre Productions ^_^), and it kept me glued to my seats when I got the first draft. However, I probably have a different opinion since the main character of my own fanfic is starring in this fic ^_^ (kinda like how you'd react seeing your kids playing with your good neighbor's kids ^_^).

Regardless, the Guild may put up another piece like this sometime in the near(or far) future, so thanks for giving some nice, constructive criticism for us ^_^.

You three boys settle down with these virtual chocolate chip cookies and a glass of milk, cuz I´m afraid...well...I can´t believe I´m saying this, but...I didn´t like it.

The simple problem is that the story needs a large pair of garden shears to be taken to it. The whole first part where the two agents are interrogating Nick could be cut, with the story starting with the Titans Lt. Colonel. The literary conversations with ¨fan Waal¨, while clever and fun at first, got long and eventually annoying. The whole ensemble suffered from a serious lack of forward momentum.

I think the culprit may be that it feels like a chapter from a larger work as opposed to a short story. In a novel you can ¨stride¨ as it were, with the prose, taking more time to flesh out descriptions and conversations. A short story is a literary sprint; you have to go from point A to point B in a brief amount of space and you STILL have to convey your meaning.

The writing is beautiful as always and it is fun to see the three authors´ works woven together so well, but this thing needs to be tightened up, badly. I was actually bored while reading this, and I never dreamed that you lads would give me that reaction.