If you wish to see your story being flamed, visit my account. Go to my stories and click on "PPC: Dawn and Dusk" and go to Chapter 2. There you will witness how much Agents/Readers suffer when they read such things as this.

I am sorry to have to flame you. I wish you all the best in writing better stories. You have great potential.

Navaer,

D&D

Erm, I've only read this far, but I already know that this is a total Mary Sue. Is it SUPPOSED to be one? I mean, no offence, but she's sort of...too special, if you get my meaning. Sorry again if I'm flaming you.

WonderWow

beautiful ending
lol

Great story.

HOW COULD YOU STOP THERE?!?!?!!?!?1 keep goin!

i think...they're best as a couple!lol keep goin

i rly like it ur doming an awsome job r u gonna reveal her power soon?? lol keep goin


Germangirl678

I like it! but 1 question where's merry?

I love it!I'm going to read the sequel now!

great potential hope there's more to come.
later

i really like that song

what about merry

Good Prologue!!

ShopGirl1

great story. i cant wait for the next part. later.

this is a great story so far, but just so you know elledan is spelled elladan and esthel is spelled estel, just thought you would like to know. anyways, keep up the great work.