 Koroc 2003-06-30 . chapter 1Heh... I liked this story. I'm curious about something, though...
About the introduction:
In his matching trunks, Kunou walked over slowly. "We've been stuck on this island so many years...we're lovebirds in paradise, right?" He put an arm over Ranma's shoulder as they admired their four children.
"I'm so blissful," she said...
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Is the reference intentional, or am I only assuming there was an allusion? |
 elisteran 2003-06-17 . chapter 1Funny.
I did thought the summary was a bit misleading, though; it made it sound very much more AUish than this ended up being (like Ranma's #1 ambition was to have kids by Kuno, and now Kuno had to live up to it). The formatting was a bit distracting (too much whitespace), and I noticed a few spelling errors (e.g., 'Nobel Lord'). The story's direction felt a bit wavering, as it tried to blend Ranma's psychological introspection with a wacky storyline.
All in all, this was a worthy story, but it felt a little below some of Ron Dow75's other stories. |