That was beautiful. And sad. I wish that they could have been able to be happy, but fate seemed to want them apart. Great one-shot.

Oh, good one!
This just proves that you don't need to get all descriptive and hot to get the emotion through!
*applauds*

I'm not really into the shounen ai thing, but this is really cute

r u gonna continue this or start another story? keep writing!

that was beautiful. and i cant say much more without making this cheesey, which would not suit your story at all.

Excellent! Nicely done. You've got talent as a writer, keep writing!

Very sweet, sad, lovely, and touching. One of the few truly well-written Amiboshi/Suboshi stories I've read yet.

very sweet^^ i love the AmiXSuboshi pairing. so cute! hope there'll be more soon...

I LOVE IT!! *grins* that was sweet, so nice and wistful...

Aww... *sniffles* Poor Suboshi...this was so sweet, though. Sad, but sweet.