nice first chapter!

ok ur fanfic is by far the best i've read so far! that was an awesome ending. im so glad brian and sara are together instead of them just being "friends" great job

hey! me again. just wanted to say that ur fanfic is still awesome. cant wait to read the next chapter. *hoping that brian will finally be with sara in the end*

scorpio

ok i no u already wrote the next chapters and everything but i still wanted to review. im hoping that whenever i finish reading ur fanfic, sara and brian will be together becuz i dont think monica and brian make a very good couple. well neways good job on the

ok i really liked the chapters but the only thing i didnt get was this sentence u wrote in it:

“ I want you to move because you want to not because you think it’s better for Monica or me.” Brian didn’t want Sara to move but if it made her happy, Brian had no objections.

otherwise ur chapters r awesome so far scorpio

sounds good so far.

that was a good story

Read a book. Learn how to paragraph proper sentences and desribe body movements. Also, please decide what tense you want this story to be in. It's frustrating when you switch from one to the other- and it doesn't help that your short, blunt, uncreative sentences-
(eg. “ Hi.

Hey it's been a long time since I've read this story, but my computer went down. Anyhow it worth the wait ot come back to this story it was really beautiful.

I don't mean to diss your story completely-but please!
TENSES!
And what's with the format...are you a playwright or a fool...come on...work with me here lil' miss Isabelle8
Your grammar should be in the slammer
But it is a good story line...I was wrapped...no seriously...it was good and I only hope you can pursue Hemmingway with as much gusto as you've pursued Bruckheimer.

I liked your ideas! I thought you did a great job!

i really liked that story it was a really good story the whole story was good. i thing you should be a writer you would be so good at it.

i really like this story please keep up the good work. i really hope sara lives.

This really is a great story. It made me cry though...I have a daughter named Samantha so it was just really hard to read... good job making it so emotional! I can't wait for the next chapter...I hope she's okay!

AH! Brian can't die! He just can't cause he's so hot! That and him and Sara have to get together. Anyway, very suspenseful chapter, I loved it!