Oh - oh - oh. I love this to pieces. It is absolutely beautiful, and the characters shine right through.

Poor Theoden *sobs* This is a wonderful poem.

Fabulous! Stern, dignified, very Old English and very touching. Absolutely right.

Beautiful ...

This had so many haunting and touching images in it, and just the right ring of "age" and time to make it seem an ancient work. I am not scholar of poetry, I can't tell a sonnet from a bonnet, but the meter and pacing of this really strike me as perfect for stately verse written by a kingly man in deep mourning. One might almost think it a translation of some aged text somewhere. Very nice, and very sad. Thank you for sharing this!
Cheers ~

Erin

This is very good. I am not sure what the punctuation rules are for this sort of poetry, but if it will not violate them you may wish to consider using periods or semi-colons to mark where a sentence or independent clause ends. It caused me a bit of confusion here and there while reading. Otherwise, this is fine writing. Thank you for sharing it.