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| miki-miki-omo 2008-06-03 ch 7,  | abuse. . . .PORQUE?!?!?! |
| miki-miki-omo 2008-06-03 ch 2, | abusegood story! . . . damn hodges. will there be an salsh in this? p.s. the lab boss's name is conrad ecklie (most people just call him ecklie) |
| digidestinedofhope 2008-05-29 ch 8, | abusethat was halarious the end |
| Radical Pretense Gothica 2008-01-26 ch 8, | abuseYay, happy days! Haha I'm lame, seriously though, I loved how he just came back to life like that. |
| Radical Pretense Gothica 2007-11-26 ch 7, | abuseI'm not that sure your even active anymore, but for god's sake I NEED ANSWERS! |
| GregsLabrat 2006-12-02 ch 8, | abuseI'm literally rotflmao! Man! When Warrick was watching CSI: Miami and said if their lives were a tv show, it would be whole lot better was freakin hilarious and the end was bloody funny! I absolutely luved it! |
| karmine 2006-02-18 ch 8, | abuseWonderful story! i absoulutly loved it! |
| Matteic 2005-02-10 ch 7, | abuseWHAT ?! |
| Matteic 2005-02-10 ch 6, | abuseYou really like cliffhanger, uh ? I'm glad I read this story after you finished it... Matteic |
| N'drea 2005-01-29 ch 3, | abuseHeey... The one rather glaring problem I've noticed (and it's only important because this is a CSI fic) is your repeated use of "DNA" - for instance, in chapter 3 Warrick is trying to find DNA from someone who *pushed* Greg? DNA is only apparent in stuff like blood and semen... something that has actual cells, which contain the DNA itself. Warrick would be looking for handprints, hair, shoe prints on the floor, etc. Really, you wouldn't have to change the story much to make it more believable - and without having to do massive amounts of research. Just say "no leads," or "not a trace of who pushed him," or "nothing useful," instead of "DNA." The only other problem probably comes from not having a beta - small syntax errors like, "But Greg wasn't push," and "He was shock when he heard..." - but, hey, that really doesn't distract from the story ;) BUT! Despite all this, I really like where the story's going, and you've got good characterization (and characterization in the hardest thing to do!). |
| Mrs Hatake Itachi 2004-11-24 ch 8, | abuseNice story!! I like it so much!! Keep up the good work!! |
| leather leasure 2004-10-01 ch 8, | abuseits a shame u ruined a good story with a REALY bad ending my suggestion-rewrite it |
| leather leasure 2004-10-01 ch 7, | abuseargh poor greg ur making me sad now but still love the story |
| leather leasure 2004-10-01 ch 3, | abusePeople lie, but what doesn’t lie? |
| leather leasure 2004-10-01 ch 1, | abusegreat |