Good job!

That was a great story!

This is so good, your descriptions in this work are amazing and spirited, I hope to read more of your stuff in the future

Although an almost exact retelling of the real 3x3 Eyes story, It was purdy darn good.

Wow very descriptive and WOW !

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I love the Anime 3x3 eyes (Sazan Eyes) its an amazing manga i may be a gir lbut i like my fair share of gore here in there _...

I Love Gore ! and Angst and Bloody Anime !

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Good Story...

Yah...

XD Pai

You need to be more carefull with your past and present tense and there was a little too much re-telling of the story. However the story was pretty good and if you put in a little more about emotion and a little less about the previous goings on it could be a stunner. You should definitely keep up the writing as you have some excellent potential.

the story was ok but it could have been a lot better if you had used dialog. keep up the awesome stories, k? )

Wow.all i can say is WOW

I know nothing about the show but it was good. That was better then the others I have read.

How on earth do you pronounce "3$hka"?

Nice writing and very few grammar mistakes and mispellings. But even then,

I'm a bit confused: neither Sanjiyan nor Pai would say Yakumu-san in

anime/manga. Then you made it a bit dubious as Sanjiyan addressed to her

wu (in her thoughts) sometimes as Yakumo and sometimes is Yakumo-san. Which

one is correct? (the meaning would be depend of your real choice)

more more more! Puh-lease write more! i'll be waiting until u update it! Puh-lease hurry!

Wow! Your story really flows and I want to hear more. I am much impressed by your characterizations. Even if I didn't finish the tape, and I will, I could follow the story. I need to read more. This is from someone twice your age. I am so proud of you.

Quite compelling and dramatic, but a tad too colourless. Also, you can't say "going fetish", unless it's some futuristic made-up phrase of yours. Apart from that, nice piece.

Interesting telling of the idea. I liked the story, not much else to say really. I did think there was too much retelling of what had gone before.

Good. Very descriptive. Err...it's Benares not Venares. Also, there is a section on 3x3 Eyes fanfics so you might want to place it there so that this fic is not buried amongst the hundreds of general anime fanfics.

Do write more!