Reviews for After the Fall

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wellduh... 2005-08-11 ch 1, anon.	abuseBeautifully written, which is a very unoriginal comment that you've doubtlessly received many times already, but it's true, so what can I say? All the bits and pieces, Cid, Rinoa, Seifer, Irvine... the candles on the beach... great detail.
fyre byrd 2005-06-08 ch 1,	abuseThis is truly a beautiful story. I hardly know where to begin describing its beauty. You delve deep into Edea's psyche and create a troubled and complex series of emotions for her to work through. The story you create about her father is simple, but lovely, having about it a kind of fairy tale quality which works well for Edea who is such an unusual and mysterious woman. The idea of the candle which you introduce through this story works well. It's a strange way of atoning for what she has done, but it's throughtful and symbolic. The other small things that trouble her are so effective too, like the appearance of crows with their black feathers and the fact that she still has to wear all black because those are the clothes she has. Edea's relationship to power, the way she longs to have it back, but at the same time just wants to wake up from her dreams, those thoughts of hers are perfectly executed. Irvine's discussion with her is excellent as well, both of them trying to take the blame. Cid does much the same when he speaks to her. You've made all of them into good people, people with flaws, but people who just want to do what is right. Finally I enjoy the dream about Hyne. Usually it annoys me the way people insist on clubbing a person over the head with this obscure plot point, but here you have created a character out of Hyne, a kind of gentle, but extremely powerful goddess. Lastly, the ocean weaves through this entire story in ways that I cannot even begin to describe. I'm so glad that I read this.
The Kelpsinator 2004-12-09 ch 1,	abuseThis story was a joy to read! You've given such a wonderful depth to Edea, and the world around her. Even Cid and Martin take on a deeper personality. I love the feelings that run through this story.
Sorcha Zell 2003-11-26 ch 1,	abuseWow, that was wonderful and painful at the same time. I never really thought about Edea very much before, but this story was a beautiful way of opening my eyes to her point of view.
Baconfat 2003-09-12 ch 1, anon.	abuseWow. This is such a beautifully written, unusual piece. You did a wonderful job of capturing Edea's character and giving her the sort of depth I only wish we'd seen in the game. Amazing. The emotion here is so powerful, and the imagery is so perfect. I particularly liked the dream, and the legend of Hyne's tears. It takes an incredible amount of talent to pull something like this off so unbelievably well. I'm awestruck.
Suonymona 2003-08-28 ch 1,	abuseThis piece was absolutely wonderful. Both the language and the imagery within were beautiful. I particuarly liked the bit with the candles in the ocean. My favorite aspect was the characterization, though. You had everyone spot-on. Edea's mixture of remorse and yearning for her past was heartbreakingly perfect. And I was heartened to know I'm not the only person who thinks that Edea/Ultimecia slept with Seifer. :) I hope you'll write more pieces for FF8. This one is among the best I've ever read.
seventhe 2003-07-08 ch 1,	abusethis is such a beautiful piece - so poetic and emotional. your writing is phenomenal.
mike 2003-07-01 ch 1, anon.	abuseThe story's really good. (must admit: i've never been the greatest fan of edea--being controlled just sorta makes for unsatisfying conclusions to things, and i somewhat unfairly blame her. but you've redeemed her, a bit--offering sympathy but not absolution--and it works.) You've got some neat images, and hit them consistently: ice, tears, and oceans; birds, pearls, and sevens. And I like your prose style--it's bit slow to my ear, but has a pleasant cadence. (and you play with the fun themes, and play well: who knew what when & can you forgive, ambivalence about power.) [ok, a mean thing or two, for balance: sudden realizations and aching holes where power used to be are a bit familiar, verging on cliche; the goddess dream feels long to me. but those are trifles.]
Moonshine 2003-06-28 ch 1,	abuseBeautiful.
Twig 2003-06-28 ch 1, anon.	abuseYou are a glory! glory! glory! and you make Grasshopper cringe and back away slowly and search for gold-colored eyeshadow to try and make itself stand out a bit but it cannot for even tarted up it is but a pale shadow... ... and I'm not even drunk!
Alassante 2003-06-28 ch 1,	abuseIt's sad, and haunting. I have to read this again for it to fully grow inside and sink in.
Dark Phoenix 2003-06-28 ch 1, anon.	abuseThe pairings sorta bother me and I really don't see the relevance of Xu/Quistis to the story, but still, this was very well-written. ^_^
AWf4tf 2003-06-27 ch 1,	abuseWow... This was a beautiful thing to read. An interesting look into Edea's mind and what one might find there. I'm looking forward to seeing what else you can come up with. Question though: is the extra candle perhaps for Rinoa (as the powers were passed on to her) or is it for a child that represents Edea herself (like the child in the dream with Hyne)? Or are you being purposely ambiguous? (which is ok too :-)
White Aster 2003-06-27 ch 1,	abuseOh. I like. I like that Seifer burned like a flame. And the awkwardness of how to discuss/not discuss the fact that she slept with him. I like that Cid felt bad about not knowing every SeeD, every person who might kill her. I like that he was afraid to let Seifer become a SeeD, because he couldn't be sure that Seifer wouldn't try to kill her too soon. I like how Irvine was sure that Matron'd take care of it. Very, very lovely.
KMS 2003-06-27 ch 1, anon.	abuseOh, Thorne, this is just /lovely./ Your style is so lyrical and haunting, beautiful as ever, and now that I've read this I feel like I know Edea better than anyone else in my life. (Maybe I should get and play the game, so I know more than the bare bones of the plot... but I'm afraid the canon won't live up to the fanfic.) Reading this, something in my chest was curled up tight with her wants, with her regrets, with her hopes, and when the story was over it took me a few moments to come back to myself. Your summary speaks of Edea's "ordinary life," but it is anything but. Man, I wish I were a fictional character so I could live in the heads of writers like you.

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