This is shaping up to be very nice, but I am confused-how did Dios become separated from Akio? I guess I'll just have to wait and see. I am glad you are choosing to complete this story. I can't wait for more!

Very nice break. *Nod of approval*

Wow. I can see that you are constantly getting better and the false Shiori was a truely nice touch. . . I'm wondering what's next and I'll be waiting patiently for it.

Oh... Creepy. It's getting good. Try to finish the rest as well, onegai!

Good grief! How about this: Introduce two people connected to Michael. Have only one be a Duellist, but no one can figure out who. Build on Amy and the others in little snippets between building these other two. Explain how Amy got her Signet Ring. For Goodness sake, THINK! *wink*

Darn it, I when I'm almost completely off. I wasn't expecting Amy! What was up with her?

WOW. I am guessing that Michael is the Juri this time around. I am also guessing that Amy is most likely the new Rosebride. Kind of creepy. O

Oo wow. I am impressed. Keep going!

Wouldn't Miki actually graduate WITH one of the members of the Student Council? He was younger, but he was also so ahead with the grade levels (think they said he was college level already). So one would think he'd be gone with his best galpal, Juri.

It seems interesting enough, though I must say, the double line spacing is troublesome.

Interesting and promising. I can't say to much yet, but this is a very good start.