|Reviews for Flying High|
| Aus 6/11/04 . chapter 4
I LURVED IT! It was awesome! YOu need to update this more! Sorry my review kinnda sucks.. LOVE U SUNSHINE!
| kiwi 6/1/04 . chapter 3
this is a very interesting story. You haven't updated in a while though. keep going. its a great story
| onoM 3/8/04 . chapter 3
This is a really unique piece you have begun here. Wow. A blind seeker. The thought had never crossed my mind until I read these three chapters.
To make it easier to read for you, I have devided my review into two sections henceforth: pros and cons. Here goes:
Pros: Your chapters are in depth and longer than normal. You have a great way of rounding them out, and I don't know how you do it but it's really easy for me to read. There are clear starting and finishing points, and they are well defined. Congrats on that. Also, you have a very pronounced voice in this fic, I can really hear you speaking it. If that makes any sense, say so. Nobody else seems to understand the concept of voice... It's a great thing. I love the first person perspective you do, it's written very well. A great start, I think.
Cons: Your last update was 07/03. That's just not right... You need to get done with that chappie so I can read it! A few other things, all minor. Some of the things you say she does are impossible for a blind person. Such as right above the middle of chapter 2, Timothy Anderson sticks out his hand for Kevin to shake. I'm not entirely sure that's possible, personally. Although, after reading how she finds the snitch, I wouldn't doubt it's conceivable. And the only other thing I would bring to your attention is your overuse of exclamation points and question marks. Two at the end of a sentence is as many as there should ever be. Younger people have a tendency to really use a lot of them, so it's nothing major, but it'll make you seem a lot older if you hold back on those ! and ?. Such as this? and this! That's as much as I ever do, anyway. I would encourage you to not listen to this last paragraph, and instead do what you like to, and what you have fun doing. That is, after all, the point of fanfiction, right? (:
All in all, a great story though. If you'd like a Beta, I consider myself a spelling and grammar nazi. I'd me more than happy to read it before anyon- I mean, be a beta reader. If you want. I'm a pretty quick reader too. (:
You need to come out with another chapter! Quick! Keep writing!
| foreverkacey 1/6/04 . chapter 1
wow! GREAT GREAT GREAT fanfiction...really orginal...in the fact of completely making up this..character..and something..new...
| Aus 1/2/04 . chapter 3
I finally read it! Aren't you proud? I knew you would be! Okay, Snape..SNAPE! Ah hahaha..sry that's funnay. Gotta love Oliver! Okay I gotta go get pie or sumfing...
| Swordsworn 12/3/03 . chapter 3
Wow... this is an extremely well-written story... plot... good character...you get my drift. _ I must admit, though, I'm sorta worried... your last update was in July. Please don't tell me this story is going to be one of those excellent stories that NEVER gets finished? Please? I want to hear about the ball... and more Oliver... and, and, and, Kevin's first game! Lol, well, great story, update soon!
| Britt 11/30/03 . chapter 3
Okay, I hope this doesn't sound horrible of me... I just read your story and think it's absolutely Wonderful! I hope you haven't left it forever. I am now in love with the idea of a blind seeker, but I don't think I could pull it off. Your story's great and I sincerely hope you have NOT quit. I would be devastated. My heart would break. Really... no, really!
| Lupin 7/26/03 . chapter 1
Okey dokey, what was it you wanted us to say? Oh yeah... Hey! This rocks! ... No really, it does! Please keep writing, or I will grovel alongside you!
| haversnatch 7/21/03 . chapter 3
| The Second Geek 7/14/03 . chapter 2
Hey there, Louisa.
Great chappy! Very long, I must say, but that is ok and stuff. Keep it up!
Also, got a bit confusing and, once again, there are mistakes; GET A FREAKIN' BETA!
Love you and all that good stuff. (hehe. Not in that way, Stupid!)
| The Second Geek 7/14/03 . chapter 1
Hi-ya! How you doin'? lol
Ok, so about this chapter, I thought it was good, but I noticed that there were a few minstakes; you need a beta. look around.
And, er... Kevin? Not a girls' name, sorry.
| R.J. Moony 7/3/03 . chapter 3
Helpful hint: Ctrl c and Ctrl v next time you feel like repeating one word over and over again. Alot easier on your fingers ;)
Anyway, very interesting chapter, very intresting indeed...do I get to hate this Dustin dude, too? I'd be all too happy too...*gets out her fork* lol.
Quick question: Were Kevin, Annabelle and Oliver all in the same year? Wait, no, that doesn't make sense...so how much younger are Kevin and Annabelle than Oliver? They were in school with him in second year so...er, sorry, just wondering _
Ew, bit grossed out about the whole Snape thing.
Looking forward to more Oliver in the next chapter!
| NessNess 7/1/03 . chapter 1
Hey! It's me, Melissa! I have another s/n, and yea. All that good stuff.
| R.J. Moony 6/30/03 . chapter 2
Oh, yay, Oliver makes an appearance, even though it was short, but hey, he's still there! Anyway, I still don't understand how Kevin can do all the stuff she does, being blind and all. I dunno, I just sometimes forget that she is when reading this.
Oh, and that Alex guy is evil. PUREE evil. *stabs Alex with fork* Diediediediedie...ok, you get the point.
Yeah, only one thing that could be improved in this chapter: More Oliver! Ohter than that, very nice.
| musegirl88 6/30/03 . chapter 2
That was excellent! You must write more soon! :)