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| Chocobut 2008-07-13 ch 1,  | abuseWow, um...let's get this started. I didn't mind the story. The lemon was pretty well written, especially because you said you were new to it. The story was kind of off though. 1) Why did Sirius have those clothes on?? I get that tight leather pants are sexy but they seemed really random and out of place. (This IS taking place in Hogwarts so he would have no need for them.) 2) They just had sex. I get that this is a lemon one shot but the reason they had sex was lack luster. I can basically summarize this plot in three words. Nothing. Sex. Nothing. Not that the story was NOTHING, but you get what I mean, right?? There was no background history between the two. Just heated glances and such. I feel like you rushed it just so that you could write a lemon. 3) What happened to Remus not wanting sex?? "For a brief moment Remus feared he was going to undo his pants - he wasn't ready for that" I get that there's always heat of the moment kind of things but this pushed it too far. To go from friend to sex buddy in a ten minute period is kind of odd. 4) In the lemon there was no protection/lube used. You do understand how much that would hurt right? Remus wouldn't be screaming in pleasure, he'd be screaming in pain.(and MAYBE some pleasure.) All in all not a horrible fic. I actually liked how you left Remus hanging in the end. I felt bad but that's life. Next time just maybe go back and check to make sure everything fits in with the world or basic understandings of life(aka lube please!) :) |
| unknownymous.me 2008-04-24 ch 1, | abusehaha... nice... it was teasingly wonderful... haha... loved it... |
| kitabayashi-san 2007-07-07 ch 1, | abuseyeah i totally agree with you the world needs more sirius and i was compleatly devestated when he died...i love sirius remus pairing tra la la |
| Eyes-Wide-Open1989 2006-10-27 ch 1, | abusesweet |
| The Miss Marauders 2006-08-02 ch 1, | abuseWhee!! Fab--SLASH!! ^^ I enjoyed that! x Cazzy x |
| Gaming Ikari 2006-01-19 ch 1, | abuseLady Shinigami, you make me cry inside. I think I died a little bit while reading this. I'm not going to comment on much about the spelling and grammar, as you're more likely to catch that sort of thing than I am. If you'll excuse me I must go bleach out my eyes, right the fex now. I can now no longer read anything beyond the second book of Harry Potter without wincing. Thanks very much. |
| Jersey Princess 2005-08-17 ch 1, | abuseWhere the hell did 'yaoi' come from? Never heard it before. Anyway, I was terribly amused by that. It was fun to read, and even funnier how Sirius walked out at the end easily, but with a 'you know I'll be back' type of movement. I agree, there is a sort-of relationship there... x Kirstie x |
| Pavla 2005-08-02 ch 1, | abuseGreat story--I agree that you should update with more chapters. |
| JJ 2005-06-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseYou're kidding me!! You're not going to update? PLEASE! |
| sleeper6 2005-03-12 ch 1, | abuseThis is so good, love how good they fit together. Very nice; just a little disappointed that Sirius isn't more affectionate at the end, but yeah, there's gotta be awkwardness. |
| Mary James 2004-11-15 ch 1, | abuseUgh. I love Remus/Sirius. That was excellent. Also, my email isn't working right, plus my computer is crashed (I'm at the library) and I would subscribe to your community but this damn computer or internet or something isn't working properly. So I apologize in the delay at getting back to you. And also for not being able to subscribe in order to post my fics. Because I would be honored! Something might be disabled or some other thing. Or maybe I'm just incapable. Excellent story though! |
| syntaxandgramma 2004-06-19 ch 1, | abuseOh that was wonderful. I hope Sirius' wasn't playing with Remus. Lovely. |
| Tanja88 2004-04-12 ch 1, | abusecute I hope u update... love, TJP |
| Nikufei 2003-12-04 ch 1, | abuseluv da story! |
| Marron Babe 2003-09-14 ch 1, | abuseWell, I usually don't read Harry Potter fics, as you can tell by my pename I'm more a DBZ/anime fan, but I just got curious one day after reading the fifth book and read your fic and well, it was great. Very yummy! :P |