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| erosgirl 2004-12-17 ch 1,  | abuseThis part: "It's PLAYTIME!" Seconds later, the Time-top winked out of existence, leaving behind an empty warehouse. Too many “It’s PLAYTIME!”s in too small a space of time. Notice in the show he says it about once, maybe twice an episode. You’ve already got it more than that.If I sound mean, sorry. I'm not real great at wording things diplomatically. Seeya!! ^__^ |
| Maria Alanis 2000-12-29 ch 1, anon. | abuseNot a bad story. But I noticed that the "Mutual Evolution Theory" idea looks like it was taken out of Kim McFarland's story "Time in a Battle": In "Blast from the Future": "And even if we try again it still won't work. Ya see, it all comes down to the Mutual Evolution Theory. Over the years, we've both developed our own fighting style, and Darkwing has developed his own style to match ours. We've adapted to his old tricks and he's adapted to our old tricks. Any new trick we come up with will be countered by a new trick he comes up with. And he's so experienced that he'll come up with a counter trick on the spot. In "Time in a Battle": Admittedly, Darkwing was a match for Negaduck now. What did Negaduck know now which would defeat an earlier Darkwing? They had been fighting each other for so long that they had actually evolved each other. Like a predator and its prey - the prey, to survive, learned to fight, and the predator, to thrive, became stronger and meaner. What he would do was spring the nastier predator on the weaker prey! But he would have to plan this one carefully... Coincidence? |
| Ghost in the Machine 2000-12-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseWould have like to have seen Quackerjack get lightly fried when he shook hands with Megavolt. (It would have made for a nice punchline.) "I did?" "You did." "Oh, OK then" Terrific exchange there. LOL Hmm... Can the timestream take a Megavolt switch? Well, I hope you write another story so we can find out. (On a technical note, a couple of syllabobbles, but nothing too major.) |