hey shakira! joyce here (: nice story ** style. cya around! tata (:

This is very good! Can't wait to read more!

very good keep going

You know, Kira-Reen, this could be a really good story, but I feel you are short changing yourself and everyone else by not going into more detail in your story. I feel like every chapter is not really a chapter but a brief synopsis of what could be a really good part of the story. The basic plot is interesting but unless you can expound on the story, you are going to lose everyone's interest and that would be too bad because I think you have a great imagination and could really make this a terrific story. Just maybe go back and add more story to it and give your characters more to say and show how they feel. I hope this encourages you to continue writing rather than discouraging you. I hope to read "more" of your story even if I have to wait longer between chapters for you to add more details. Thanks for your efforts and May the force be with you.

Yes, I definetly want more. Do you think you can provide more chatpers soon?