A curious Name Umineko Naku or Seagull's Scream, I like it very musch plus the story is great!

Whoo hoo! Awesome story, Query. I found this first on your Riddler site and found it extraordinarily deserving of a review, so here it is! I love the song, and I love the fic. ^^ The mind games were clever, and Eddie & Query's relationship was sweet. You deserve some cookies! -offers them-
--MorbidCheshire

Wow. You really are a very talented writer, you know that? I'm thoroughly enjoying your work, and can't wait to read the rest of it. You write Eddie so well, and Dee is the perfect partner for him. I especially love the moments of awkwardness between them. Oh, and the nickel thing was a very nice touch. :)

Oh, honestly. Why are those two surprised at finding out all that stuff the doctor told them about one another was complete garbage? They KNEW he was a total arse. I suppose it's just their insecurities or something, but it still makes me want to throw marshmallows at them.
And I'm still curious about the nickel.

I hope somebody runs that doctor over with three buses and a pogo stick. That is all.

This is by far my favourite chapter of yours that I've read so far. I love all the little details, like Dee's observation about Eddie looking good in the colour grey, and Eddie's comment about the "lessers" (LoL)
Also, your use of the song lyrics here is perfect. I had already been feeling the relationship between Dee and Eddie, but when Eddie quoted that line I actually got a little misty-eyed. (yes, I do get too involved when I read something. I can't help it!) It was so simple, but so moving at the same time. Brilliant job!

Dee's comment about villains and heroes is exactly what I've been saying for years! Villains are almost always more interesting and fun to read about, if only because the heroes are so bloody boring.
Eddie really is touchy when it comes to comments about his intelligence, isn't he?
A nickel, eh? Hm...Now I'm curious.

Aw, he brought her a sandwich! That's so sweet.
The ease with which the doctor messes with his patients' heads really is troubling. Why do they even listen to him? Someone ought to just shove him out a window and get it over with.

I can't believe your stories have been out there so long and I've only now found them! Oh well, I guess I'll just have to play catch-up. :)
The opening chapter to this one has pulled me in already. The hypoglycemia thing is an interesting development, as is the fact that the doctor is willing to take advantage of it. What a bastard. Oh, and he'd better not even THINK about trying to turn Dee against Eddie! I'll just have to keep reading to find out.

Wow. Really, really nice. Sorry it took me so long to get around to reading it! Um... What Chris said. I hope you like this story, because it's *my* favorite so far. I think your writing just gets better & better!

One small critique; pelt me with rotten fruit if you must.

It wasn't until the end of Chapter 10 that Dee and Eddie actually discuss their feelings with each other, and start bantering the word "love" around. Yet prior to this, they're quoting "their song" to each other...at least I presume "Seagulls Screaming" is their song. Anyway, by the time a couple has "a song", haven't they already usually confessed their love for one another?

Just my two cents, your mileage may vary, etc etc

Oh wow, you finished it! Q, I don't want you to think this is puffing: this is an extraordinary story, Query is an exceptional creation, and the relationship you've explored here does what not one fan fiction "romance" in a thousand does, looks at those delicate bitter sweet complexities that make romance appeal to us.
"You're confident enough to know what you want and not to settle for just anyone" (two chapters back, I went looking for it) - what HE is getting out of the relationship is how HER loving him makes HIM feel because of the qualities he perceives in HER - amazing. Beautiful. You GET IT.
And yet none of this is a schmaltzfest, it is incidental detail inside a larger story, and in Mattheson, I'll say again, you created yourself quite the repugnant villain.
Really well done.

Hmm. I see a useful business card in the future: "Edward Nigma: Gay Prude".

Nope. Too much like "Fred Garvin: Male Prostitute", I guess.

Anyway, finally onto the much anticipated sexual congress? Oh, wait. What am I saying? This is FFN...

CHAPTER 6: Great chapter! I enjoyed flipping back and forth between Dee and Eddie in that fashion. I was also glad to see the Carnival origins pop up. I've always maintained that their meeting was a serendipitous event that needs to be celebrated. I also enjoyed Eddie's spot-on analysis of just what kind of kitten-torturing scum Matthiessen is.

CHAPTER 7: I enjoyed 7, too...though I felt that the pace may have been a bit rushed. But in all honesty, that could be my fault for having to read through it more quickly so I could get to work.

I think it's great that you're able to keep Dee and Eddie's natural hesitation toward one another. This is a new relationship between two people who like and care about one another. I think they'd take it slow and gentle.

Great work on the hypoglycemia. My hypoglycemic gets extremely cranky and mean, then faints...and were I trying to escape an asylum, I think that would make it difficult.

Good job!

I love Eddie's dream about dancing with Dee... so very romantic.

It's about time he started thinking about breaking out. He and Dee both have lock picks; why has we waited so long to escape?

Hey! I first stumbled upon your work through Cuddlenundrum. I love what you write. Keep it up, Q! **huggly dance of stuff**