this is good but i tink you shuld put ranma in this fic, not in ukio place but meke he came in the second or third mision

hnn... not to be ** or anything but how could it be 1/2 if there are no 1/2's on the story?? no transgendered or trans-species people?? would it not have been better if you had called it ... something else?

Ukyo... she should have been rougher with the yakuza. it's not her character to be ... 'gentle' with her opponents ... ranma despite being taught by genma is and is shown in the manga to do so. ukyo however is not. she is actually rather viscious towards her enemies or rivals. the yak should have had several broken ribs, apendages (including a broken 3rd leg) before he landed on the floor. a girl was about to be raped and so righteous MARTIAL ARTIS female fury would make sure that the yak (especialy if he is a yak) does not have the opportunity to continue.

just a few thoughts on the matter... oh and the first chapter was better... why is that??... please imoprove, this story has... potential... do you??

nice... very nicely written...
... still... i don't think that a car hitting her could kill ukyo. she's too tough for that. severly injure her maybe but not kill... definitely not kill... it she were run over by a train though that would be another matter. ryouga would survive it ... maybe ranma but definitely not ukyo.. but a car?? definitely not cannon... still, it's your story so it's your call... maybe the car was made of cybertronian armour and was going at speeds many times faster that the speed of sound ... still your story and all that... still... good stuff though.

^^ Nice! But you haven't updated in awhile...you need to update soon. :D

It's rather interesting, I do hope that you update this soon.

Spork or Foon

Well,
I like it alot but it's too short! I get it's a prologue and a damn fine one but write a first chapter please!

You've set up a nice little intro for all things to happen and even though a lot of crossovers start with "This character died" I'm thinking you can pull it off! :D

Tiney

A nice dark fic.