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Good begininng. Now it needs a middle and an end. ;)

Fantastic! This story has me worried about Punky! Well written! Please update very soon! :)

I think it's good. Very genius, and I wonder what Ryan is plotting...

you've got to finish it! the writing style is kinda choppy and unnatural, but its the exact same style the TV show is written in. very authentic! you did a really good job!

o DUN DUN DUN! update please! -pleads on floor-

Cool Story! I hope that you update it soon! I can't wait to read more.

I am a very young fan of Punky Brewster (12), but I am addicted enough to know that your story is very good, well thought out, well written, and likely to happen.(Not that Ms. Johnson dies, but you know what I mean) This may not make sense. Xp I KNOW IT DOESN'T! But I love Punky Brewster, and hope to see more of this story! lca_dark_faerie is my neopets username. if antone sees this, BE MY NF!

Well I'm definately interested in the storyline.

ok as for you not thinking that it is a good story you are wrong. I for many years have wanted to see Punky go on and grow and the most I got out of that was Soleil Moon Frye being a college room mate to a teenage witch. I know you wrote this long ago, I am new to fan fiction, I hope that you will expand on this story and go on because you left it hanging. I love the story.

Wow, I totally forgot about this! Please update soon! It's really good!

My friend Amanda likes your story, of course she is crazy, and obsessed because she looks like Punky when she was little, but still good story.

Cool! I'm glad someone put Punky on here! I loved Punky, too! This sounds like a great start. I like the idea that she is a doctor now!

As for the way the story appears on this board, you have to be creative. LOL! This board tends to adjust everything its way, so you have to work with that. You can space sections by including 5 or 10 eights and centering them. You can use the board's controls to center, get italics, bold, etc. But some things cannot be done.

Anyway, loved the start of your story!

Gerry

I think the basic storyine can be made a bit more stronger. All that happens here is a girl gets some bad news. If Betty Johnson died, apart from being a mentor, how has she affectd Betty's life?

One cannot measure the intensity of remorse here.

If one is really running late, then one doesnt pickup the phone.

If the story had a bit of twist then it would have been a better read. Eg. The phone rings, Punky doesnt pickup the phone. She later learns that evening that the person who tried ringing her was Henry who was desperately trying to contact her to save Betty's life. Had she picked up the phone, may be Betty would still have been alive now?

This is just constructive criticism. I've written a few short stories myself and I always feel there is scope for improvement in the next. Do not take these comments for discouragement.

yeah great chapter please add more soon.