i don't know... i guess this chapter would have been good in the story... i admit that when i turned from chapter ten to eleven it did seem sort of abrupt to go right to the celebration feast... but it's still good the way it is!
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ya.. this was also a GREAT beginning for the story... but I do admit that i liked the one that you used for the story better.. i don't know why though..
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not bad. it's certainly a lot better than some OTHERS that i've read.