I've been liking re-reading this fic so far, except for one thing that leaps out at me more than it did three years ago when I first read this -

You've gone out of your way to make Ron as thick as a brick and about as likable. The canon portrayal of Draco Malfoy is how a truly insecure and selfish gobshite acts. (and I admit this as a writer of a Draco POV fic mmkay :P )

Ron, in canon, has not been presented anything like this. He's not perpetually spiteful, dogmatic and insensitive.

this is great please update again soon

Excellent prologue and set-up. Given what has since been revealed in HBP and DH your well-worked-out theories have stood the test of time. :)

Onwards!

I just have to say Dumb ** does he not realize that with out the prefect badge he can't be head boy with Hermione next year. Their for they can't share a private suite together. Oh well his loss.

This is an excellent story w/ a compelling plot and excellent character interactions. I'm sorry you seem to have abandoned it. I'm adding it to my story alerts in case you ever decide to pick it up again.

Why did Ginny need to borrow Hedwig when she got her own owl, Mercury, for making prefect?

Wonderful story. Shame it's abandoned, but even knowing that it was worth the read.

It's a sign of how very interesting your summary was - that I actually chose to read a story that is not only incomplete, but apparently hasn't even been touched by an author's hand in nearly five years.

It's also a testament to how interesting the story turned out to be (because great summaries don't always lead to great stories), that I read all 57 chapters before I even noticed the date of your last update (September of 2004?! What happened?!).

Normally, I check completed status and date of last update before even considering reading a story. Your story, however, enticed me to forego my usual routine, and now I'm sitting here going, "Oh, man! It's not finished! Oh, man!! It hasn't been updated since 2004! NO!" Ok, so I wasn't really yelling like that, but I was whispering harshly (after all, it's late and I don't want to wake anyone else).

So, if you're still around, and I guess I'll see if you've updated your profile lately - I haven't actually seen it, since I found your story on someone else's favourites list - perhaps your profile has an explanation.

Anyway, in case it's not clear, I really enjoyed reading the first? only? 57 chapters and wish fervently that you'd pick it up again someday and finish it. I know that, sometimes, a writer can get tired of their own story (at least I know that I do - that's why I haven't posted anything new in a while, and also why I am working on at least three stories a bit at a time - I work on one until I get tired of it, or stuck, move to the next one, and so on. Who knows when I'll manage to finish one!)

But enough about me. I just hope that you're in good health, your family's in good health, you're not experiencing some horrible tragedy - that you're just bored with fanfiction. I'd rather hope that than wonder if something bad happened that forced you to stop writing.

So, I think, because I enjoyed this story so much, that it will join the very short list of unfinished stories currently residing on my favourites list. (I don't usually mark unfinished stories with Favourite - it's a habit I started back when there was a limit to how long your list could be).

Thanks for writing, and if you're still around, respond to this review with a quick, "I'm fine and you can quit worrying."

~"~

wat crap. So u dont like hermione with the dolt eh? You know, you have written absolute crap...this is by far the crappiest i have ever read..harry and hermione are so gross in this...and i have read ships like dementor and hermione...honestly..this is the limit to crappieness...hope DH was a big shock to you!:d

Harry really need to take Arithmancy and Ancient Runes.

I totally disagree with Dumbles and it show a complete lack of understanding of human nature, psychology, war, espionage and how to get rid of LV. It is proof of Dumbles completely idiotic idea of trying to change everybody back to the Light.

Once you had narrowed down who knew about the Fidelius Charm you start winnowing out who it is exactly. Put three houses inder the charm for the Longbottoms. Make Augusta the Keeper for the mansion which is where they all will actually be and one house each for Frank and Alice. Then make up safe houses for James and Lily one for each one of their friends and then one for them to actually live in making James the Keeper since Lily was casting the spell. Make sure it looks like they lived there. Place this information on file with Gringott's, your solicitor and charmed to be opened only in event of your death. Since only the Keeper could tell and all the Keepers would believe the families were living under their spell ONLY the house guarded by the spy would be affected.

Severus never got over so much. Bumbles never realized what damage he did to him as a child. Putting Harry with him was like putting a light match near gas fumes. It was bound to explode. The sheer stupidity of this is appalling. Also with Snapes obvious inability to teach his gift of Potions Bumbles effectively gutted an entire generations worth of Aurors and Healers. This lack of long term thinking cost them so many lives. Not hunting down the Horcruxes BEFORE harry even got to school shows a considerable lack of foresight.

Harry may need accepting but Harry has never trusted adults, rules he doesn't understand (cause they always change) and people who lie to him. He would never trust DumDum like you have portrayed here.

Very interesting and educational chapter.

It really is too bad that you've stopped writing this story. It is very good. If you ever decide to return to it, know that there is an audience.

I especially created an account on this website to tell u this... you have butchered each and every one of these characters in the worst way possible... i know lot of people do that...what sets you apart from them is that you had every thing...intellect...way of writing...and u did what ? u used that to destroy these characters from every frikin aspect...I'm a HHR shipper but aftr reading this piece of hormonal garbage ...man ur dumb.

While I realize that the likelyhood of your returning to this story is not very high, I do think it is an excellent story and I would gladly read more of it. Thanks for writing. W.