I am resisting the impulse to flame. really hard. because i do actually like this story. i just happen to be really REALLY irritated by the dialogue. or lack there of. or the dialogue with gapping holes in it. cloud will say something or daine will ask something or the badger will be cryptic...except they never actually DO say anything. I am beyond irritated by the dialogue. I want to know what they are saying damnit! *crys in corner*

is there gonna be a next chapter or part? I'd love to read more of your story. This (the last) chapter comes to a rather interesting end and I wanna know how shocked numair will be when he realizes that Daine is two people! please update again!

Once again, plz PM me!

Now, I love this story, so PLEASE find me on fanfiction net and PM me on why u aren't continuing!

I think I'd like this story if it wasn't so confusing to read. You have to include what the badger and Cloud say when they are talking to Daine, rather than just "Cloud responded." And please use quotation marks. They are missing from the first half of the chapter.

I hope that you don't stop here because I still love it! I like the whole thing with the idea of what would happen if only one thing changes.

Please continue the story.

Much better now that all the thoughts and such are in place. If there was anything that was important that disappeared, could you repeat it later?

are you ever going to update?

This is so good. Please carry on writing it.

What'dya stop FOR! Don't b silly! ppl want u to finish this scenario, it's fascinating! We all want to know how Daine manages to pull this off with Numair and all. Will she tell him? Probly not, but we wish she would. Wouldn't that be sommat? hehe. So WRITE, WRITE, WRITE! i know u're still there! Pick up ur neglected writers pen and FINSIH! PLZ! I'm BEGGING you! Don't hold me in suspense any longer...! agh!

Enough dramatics. If you don't i will be VERY angry and never review this story again! humph!

huh. You keep missing the mindspeech between Cloud and Daine and its REALLY annoying that we miss things when we read it, so you'd btr fix dat. other than, good. Very good.

aw... this is cute! can't wait for you to continue! you should have miri and daine become friends.

This is totaly cool! i completly can't wait for the next chapters!

I love this story, first time I read it was on a different sight. I searched for it again for AGES! 'cuz I hadn't finished it! So now I get to finally read it! It awesome, particularly like the detail on the prolog, not many authors bother with that. But any ways, Could you please break chapter 1 in half, even if it's kind of choppy because it is so long the end gets caught off right as she first senses the stormwings in the forest. If you would do that I'd be mighty thankful.

cool