that was really good! poor qui-gon. he's so lucky to have a friend like obi-wan.

genius, as always, obi. you're writing is amazing. It flows very well and is so natural! parts got a bit repetative, but i can see the purpose behind that, and i'm just...wow'ed. i kept waiting for qui-gon to ignore obi-wan and go (that was a great setup for that direction) but the transition was flawless. and you've got a great setup to something else here. ;) again, outstanding job!

Hey, that was very good. The confrontation was very tense. Good to see that they have problems but everything is still all right in the end.

Very Good! Bravo!