Again I find that you have used grammar incorrectly, in the form of not using a , within in the speech.

This seems a good plot, but it would be better if you explained more about what Ginny's on about- not everybody has knowlege about the stars.

-Emma

Firstly, this is constructive critisism. Not a flame. Please, please do not consider this to be a flame.

I have found some things wrong with the first chapter. For one, Ginny and Harry act wildly OOC (out of character).

For two, the effects of the Obliviate spell are not that someone forgets and then goes all Luna, and then decides to blurt out their feelings and kiss the nearest person. They merely make somebody forget.

From what we can gather, the only reason that Lockhart went all dreamy aafter the spell is that it had gone wrong, due to Ron's broken wand.

You don't use speech properly in the story. You type, for example "Yup" without the comma that should follow it. The correct way of writing it would be "Yup,".

I hope this helps you, and I will carry on reading and review again soon.

-Emma

I think it was quite cute- how did you figure those things out about the stars? Did you make it up?

good but i think that you should do more. i am really anticipating what is going to happen!!! i want to read more, hear the rest!!! hurry up!!! :P please??!!!!!

awwww.... that was so sweet.

this story is so true. and gin's my fav. u?

hmmmmmm.........

Short, but it sounds like it'll be another good one! =)

That didn't suck. It was the SWEETEST story! I'm sorry to say, but the sappy, fluffy stories with happy endings are my favorite. I thought that was great. :):):) I love, LOVE h/g fics and r/hr fics. harry/cho fics are good too. Any sappy romances suit me. ::smiles:: I love it how you made Ginny so confident and mysterious!! Perfect.

I loved it!!!!

That was very cute! Odd twist too..

The whole 4 parter is so cute love it!

Why would I say it sucked? Great job!

That was really good!!!!!!! g/h is the only way to go!!!!!!(and of course r/h)