Hmmmm...

Hi! I hope you're not offended by this, I mean, this is purely constructive criticism, believe me, no offense intended.

The plot's okay, but think about it... Aoshi having an affair? Isn't that a little farfetched? And erm... well, I know you probably worked hard on this, but can you try working a little harder in the grammar department? I mean, I think I really would've enjoyed the fic if it weren't for those grammatical glitches. But I think the fic shows a lot of promise, just try to get a spellchecker or something, ok? Thanks for the time, ja mata ne! _

not bad