Hello, I started reviewing each chapter in the middle of the story for two reasons. One, I didn't think of it until then, and two, because that's where the action really starts to pick up.

Chapter 7: Lizbet and Belle singing messages to each other in French is very very clever. Also, I love how when the story is from Belle’s POV that some French words are sprinkled throughout her dialogue and internal monologue. It adds charm and credibility to her character.

Chapter 9: Really well written fight scene. I could picture everything that was happening very clearly. (hee hee, you used the word manhood *snicker*)

Chapter 10: Hee hee, Edmund, Rose, Mud, a pig named Jack, and hands in inappropriate places. Fun stuff! Also, bloody voodoo ceremony, creepy much?

Chapter 11: I love how you captured Will’s tendency to be a bit overly cliché in his heroic statements. The scene where Bill and Jack talk about trying to escape is really funny and totally something I could see actually happening with these characters in this genre.

Chapter 12: Elizabeth’s father being the bad guy all along is an interesting twist. I just personally always thought his character to be a bit too weak to have pulled something like this off, regardless of how insane he managed to get. Ooh, Will’s gonna drown. *shudders*

Chapter 13: Oh, come on! I was really liking Edmund.

Chapter 14: Whew! Okay, Edmund’s okay. Jack vs Jack, woot! I really liked this line of Jack’s "I take it back," he said. "You do have guts after all." That is some really clever wordplay.

Will’s anguish when Lizbet falls into the water is really beautifully real. Props for bringing Elizabeth’s spirit back to save her daughter, I was kind of expecting that. ;) Also, I love Bill’s pity for Swann: Bill quirked a half-smile. "I hope he knows her now," he said quietly. That’s a really lovely scene.

The little epilogueish section of the last chapter is a nice closing to a strong story. The scene where Jack is tickling Lizbet is adorable. Also, I’m glad you had Jack explain that he couldn’t stay landlocked forever, because that’s true and you had me worried a bit with the whole lordly thing.

Overall I enjoyed this story very very much. Thanks for sharing it with me.

I absolutely love this story! It's amazing! I just got a "Life Story" Magazine feat. Pirates 3, and in the sample FanFic area yours was listed so i had to come and read it! Congrats on that! Awesome Story!

Excellent work.

Absoulutley bloomin' marvelous!! I can' belive it. You actually pulled it off!! This is definitly going on the favs list!!

Good night everyone!!
ArmoredSoul,
signing out!

Oh God in Heaven this cannot be!

WIL!
:dives into water, starts jerkign at rope:
WILL! C'mon, don' you DARE die on me!!

"my Elizabeth"?
Now who could that be?
At first, I was suspectign Barbossa, but now...

FALSE JACK MUST DIE NOW!! DIE NOW!
:gnashing teeth and yelling at top of lungs:

The spirit is already there? Always has been?
...
OH!
It's Liz!!

O.O
Oh GOD. Oh GODOHGODOHGODOHDEAR GOD!!
No! Not little Lizbet. Oh dear GOD no...

Good ol' Jack, always good for giving James a good nagging.
Heheh!!

"Good man, good pirate."
Thank you, Commodore...uhm... James...
...
Poor Will...

As much as this is a good story, and it is, a lot of people are going to have egg on their faces now that there is going to be not just one, but two sequels {hopefully with a wedding at the end of the second one or the beginning of the third one}.

That was bloody brilliant! (Really, :D what more needs to be said?)

Well, well, well...This is truely an amazing story. I had tears of laughter in my eyes over Norringtons comment to Bill, 'Barnacle Bill isn't it?'. I have only one comment to make, I thought Norringtons name was James...but other than that i was completely enthralled by your story.
Two Jack's, wow...you took my dream and made it real-well not real persae, because obviously I know this is only a story and...Well anyway I loved it. It was a bit bleak, what with so many near deaths and all(oh and not forgetting the lovely 'Lizbeth, I'm still drying my eyes over that, sob sob).
And I dont think Jack will be able to stay away from The Pearl for too long, well not long enough to become a landlubber for real anyway!! He'll be off doing the whole 'I'm Capatin Jack Sparrow, Savvy' in no time, but with frequent trips to see the inhabitants of Port Royal, no doubt.
Right...I believe I've said all that I wanted too, there's nothing left now other than...
Ta luv *sweeps hat from head places over heart and with a little bow, backs away*
Rogue-Pirate