Wow.
This was honestly an incredible story that I have really enjoyed reading! So many clever ideas captured here, and you had me completely oblivious about who the mastermind could be. Very clever idea, I thought, to have it be Swann - definitely not something I saw coming! The ending was really beautiful, as well; when you said Lizbet was wrapped in the mist I just sort of saw it taking on Elizabeth's form, and protecting her daughter like that. Excellent!
Earlier on, you had me in hysterics during the scene where the lads commandeer the ship. Norrington is so incredibly awesome in this story; I completely love him. xD And I'm glad you made Will OK in the end. :D
An excellently written story; thanks for a great read!

Hello, I started reviewing each chapter in the middle of the story for two reasons. One, I didn't think of it until then, and two, because that's where the action really starts to pick up.

Chapter 7: Lizbet and Belle singing messages to each other in French is very very clever. Also, I love how when the story is from Belle’s POV that some French words are sprinkled throughout her dialogue and internal monologue. It adds charm and credibility to her character.

Chapter 9: Really well written fight scene. I could picture everything that was happening very clearly. (hee hee, you used the word manhood *snicker*)

Chapter 10: Hee hee, Edmund, Rose, Mud, a pig named Jack, and hands in inappropriate places. Fun stuff! Also, bloody voodoo ceremony, creepy much?

Chapter 11: I love how you captured Will’s tendency to be a bit overly cliché in his heroic statements. The scene where Bill and Jack talk about trying to escape is really funny and totally something I could see actually happening with these characters in this genre.

Chapter 12: Elizabeth’s father being the bad guy all along is an interesting twist. I just personally always thought his character to be a bit too weak to have pulled something like this off, regardless of how insane he managed to get. Ooh, Will’s gonna drown. *shudders*

Chapter 13: Oh, come on! I was really liking Edmund.

Chapter 14: Whew! Okay, Edmund’s okay. Jack vs Jack, woot! I really liked this line of Jack’s "I take it back," he said. "You do have guts after all." That is some really clever wordplay.

Will’s anguish when Lizbet falls into the water is really beautifully real. Props for bringing Elizabeth’s spirit back to save her daughter, I was kind of expecting that. ;) Also, I love Bill’s pity for Swann: Bill quirked a half-smile. "I hope he knows her now," he said quietly. That’s a really lovely scene.

The little epilogueish section of the last chapter is a nice closing to a strong story. The scene where Jack is tickling Lizbet is adorable. Also, I’m glad you had Jack explain that he couldn’t stay landlocked forever, because that’s true and you had me worried a bit with the whole lordly thing.

Overall I enjoyed this story very very much. Thanks for sharing it with me.

I absolutely love this story! It's amazing! I just got a "Life Story" Magazine feat. Pirates 3, and in the sample FanFic area yours was listed so i had to come and read it! Congrats on that! Awesome Story!

Excellent work.

Absoulutley bloomin' marvelous!! I can' belive it. You actually pulled it off!! This is definitly going on the favs list!!

Good night everyone!!
ArmoredSoul,
signing out!

Oh God in Heaven this cannot be!

WIL!
:dives into water, starts jerkign at rope:
WILL! C'mon, don' you DARE die on me!!

"my Elizabeth"?
Now who could that be?
At first, I was suspectign Barbossa, but now...

FALSE JACK MUST DIE NOW!! DIE NOW!
:gnashing teeth and yelling at top of lungs:

The spirit is already there? Always has been?
...
OH!
It's Liz!!

O.O
Oh GOD. Oh GODOHGODOHGODOHDEAR GOD!!
No! Not little Lizbet. Oh dear GOD no...

Good ol' Jack, always good for giving James a good nagging.
Heheh!!

"Good man, good pirate."
Thank you, Commodore...uhm... James...
...
Poor Will...

As much as this is a good story, and it is, a lot of people are going to have egg on their faces now that there is going to be not just one, but two sequels {hopefully with a wedding at the end of the second one or the beginning of the third one}.

That was bloody brilliant! (Really, :D what more needs to be said?)