Such a wonderful story! You're writing is great and I love your Pokémonstories, but Avatar is even better ;)

Thank you for writing,

Xx

he he...cute I like that it showed the younger side of them and there feelings...keep writing AAML fics!

Ok, so sometimes I go a little overboard with reviews...this is one of those times! Haha, sorry. It just means that I really enjoyed your story and am trying to help you improve because your writing is wonderful. I hope you don't take this as an insult, because it's not at all. These are just some things I wanted to point out:

This story, while awesome, seemed a little unsuited for Pokemon. If you wanted to keep it as an AAMR story it should be AU. I think you wanted to put angst in but keep it light, and that turned out a little weird. I don't agree that 14 year olds would have such a deep understanding about love; but that's my personal opinion and I'd happily accept any disagreement.

Some other things:

(1) The poketalk translations seemed a little unnecessary. It didn't really add anything and I find it cuter when Ash and Pikachu have one-sided conversations that only Ash understands. But that the reader gets based on his reactions and answers.

(2) Misty WAY over-reacted to the date thing. Girls seriously don't do that. Plus girls mature faster than boys. I realize that is an over-generalization, but I just can't see Misty falling apart like that. She's too stubborn.

(3) Misty's outfit was really weird, and an ID bracelet?

(4) I couldn't really imagine a super expensive pizza place, let alone in Pallet. Maybe I've played the games too much, but Pallet is tiny.

(5) I think this is a spelling error: If James was "non-pulsed" he wouldn't have paused. Also, I can't imagine Team Rocket as hardcore gangsters.

Things I loved:

(1) Deliliah's dread about Ash and Misty's relationship was SO CUTE! Haha. I loved her reactions and the way she dealt with everything. Well played.

(2) The "attacks" of the sharks as compared to Pokemon was priceless. That was awesome and made me laugh!

(3) I loved your description of why the Rocket's had a little twinkle when they 'blasted off'. Very original and neat.

(4) Ash and Misty's titles for each other at the end was adorable. I loved those. I want a sticker with a picture of Ash that says "Knight of Thunder"!

(5) Besides the occasional spelling error (which were few and far-between) I thought your writing was excellent. You definitely have a way with words.

Anyway, sorry about the horrendously long review. I hope I don't sound pretentious or anything (my own writing is FAR from perfect) but sometimes I just get into my English Major editing moods. It's a curse.

Thanks for the fic! I'm adding you to my author alert; I love Sailor Moon and I can't wait to see what you write next (try more romance!).

As a serious shipper-for Stargate Atlantis-and hopeless romantic, I absolutely adored this story.

excelent

dude! that had to be one of the best fan-ficts i've ever read. that's pretty good coming from a person who recieved high honors in writing. anyway, in case you've writen more than one i read the first date. mabye you should send that in to the makers for them to make it an episode!

Fantastic story, exceedingly well written, the only flaw was that so many of those attacks weren't actual ones from the game.

My name is Elizabeth. It's hard to believe a guy wrote this. You must date alot. You want to go out sometime?

YAY! Do you realize you made a typo: '"Are you sure?" James asked. They looked nothing like the twerps he knew and hated. He shook his head. It didn’t matter. "Meowth, use a Furry attack to knock them down!"' Furry attack? I think it's Fury, but lol!

That was great! It was really sweet. You do good fluff'n'stuff )

Yet another of my inane reviews! I loved this (I've been saying that too much, lately.) The fluff, everything...

Wow. That was so beutiful, sweet, and oh my gosh! Ash was really different and Misty really was acting feminine! Great fic!

Damn cute, Ben! You're awesome!

Awwwww.. You're a brilliant romance writer! That was georgeous! So kawaii!

This is a great first date fic. It's sweet and believable how Ash was upset that Misty saw him as a little kid. Anyway I love it, but I should ,it's on my favorites list _