It's alright, but... Well, I think Dumbledore is a tad out of character. And the conversation lines in the beginning are extremely muddled up. The way you write it, the reader gets confused as to who is speaking. For example:

I am already late, and there is no one else in the corridor, so I try and make the encounter short.

“Emily Dobbsworth. Well, isn’t this a wonderful meeting?”

An average reader will assume it was the narrator who spoke, but reading on, will realise it was not. Needless to say, it is a real inconvenience.

Anyway, well done... I guess...

Not bad. It really is more about Dumbledore than the girl, even if she is the narrator. And, that's not a bad thing. ;-)

Great. Good idea using a Ravenclaw and a Hufflepuff. Reminds me of when I read a spoof that said something along the lines, about Ravenclaws and Hufflepuffs not getting attetnino if a Gryffindor is in the room unless they happen to die or something like than. Rambling. Great story.

OK, you rock anyway for reviewing my story (I'm trying to update...believe me!), and then you rock again because your penname kicks, and then you rock even more cuz I thought I was the only Episcopalian on the planet...but that's not the point. The point is, this story is really good, and also a very interesting take on dynamics within Hogwarts. I had always wondered whether Dumbledore was as considerate of everyone as he was of Harry etc. or whether it was all the weird destiny stuff speaking up...and this piece provided a very plausible answer. I like it.

Um, hey, people, kurtfan5678 here. Two of you have said that you want me to continue, but I wasn't really planning on going anywhere with this. I suppose if you really want a sequel, then I can pray that God hits me with an inspiration light bulb, even if it is two in the morning. So I'll try and work on that. Thanks for the reviews, you have no idea how much that helps, well maybe you do if you write fan fiction, so you can review anonymously, too. Maybe that's cheating, but who cares! Thank you mondo for your feedback.

I like this. Is it a one-shot thing? I'd like it to continue. It's very good. Very well good. Please update if you will.

With the exception of Emily being an American transfer student, that was really good. I love how you wrote Dumbledore as wise and fair and stuff. Interesting story.

hey this was cool!

Hey! Great ficcy! Very interesting subject..
Is this just a one-shot? 'Cause it would make for a very interesting series.. Just a suggestion..
Keep Writing!