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| Kitty East 2008-06-17 ch 8,  | abuseLame. Actually. That was pretty great. :) Just, I think it should've been spread out through more chapters, as it must've been a rather difficult decision for Remus to make. Sigh. :P |
| Kitty East 2008-06-17 ch 7, | abuseo.O That was kind of random. But. Okay. Lol. |
| Kitty East 2008-06-17 ch 6, | abuseWow. =/ There were corny things here, some cute things, and overall I liked it :D |
| Kitty East 2008-06-17 ch 5, | abuseIt would actually me "Lupin and me." Because in this case, if you take out the other person - Lupin - then it would be "between me" which would be weird to say, but grammatically correct. The way you wrote it, if you take out the other person, it reads as "between I" which is not grammatically correct. Anyway, that's just a little pet peeve I have. Remus's little rant about liking her ever since he laid eyes on her was a little weird. I mean, that's not exactly something you say on the first date, lol. |
| Kitty East 2008-06-17 ch 4, | abuseOoh, awkward. This is really cute, lol. |
| Kitty East 2008-06-17 ch 3, | abuseOoh, really liked this chapter. You made everything flow together so smoothly, and the bit about James being angry and kind of lashing out was funny. xD |
| Kitty East 2008-06-17 ch 1, | abuseI don't think Butterbeer could intoxicate anyone but house elves. :) But this was a good start. |
| Trinity Taylor 2008-03-29 ch 8, | abuseMe love love! Write more! Lily and Remus are sweet, but I think it's good you're putting Lily and James together so soon. They belong. -T.T. |
| Trinity Taylor 2008-03-29 ch 5, | abuselike story... too late... 3:24 in morning... I finish another time... good... update... snore... -t.t. |
| ArtemisMagic 2007-10-27 ch 8, | abuseyeah! i luv it! carry on, pleaz! |
| Anna B. the Greek 2005-12-29 ch 8, | abuseHey there, I liked it so much!! A nice piece of work. Your Remus in particular is wonderful :) See ya, Anna. |
| Krstna 2005-09-05 ch 8, | abuseThis chapter was better than the last, I didn't like the fact that while Remus was breaking up with her he was almost pushing her towards James, but it was a good chapter |
| Krstna 2005-09-05 ch 7, | abuseWEll that was slightly weird I would have though Remus wouldn't have gone out with her if there was a full moon but apart from that it was okay |
| Emelinee 2005-08-18 ch 8, | abusealright, that last scene would have been THE most perfect kissing scene in the world! GAR! omg, no i seriously think that Remus and Lily should be together! James is a jerk! Gawd, he's so cocky... and wow! I raelly don't like that you left it hanging! AH! you really need to update! Good story, keep writing! You write very well and sophisticated. I enjoy reading it and you do very well grammatically so its easy on the eyes. Keep going. Very nice! Emelie! |
| Krstna 2005-08-18 ch 6, | abuseThat's kind of sweet, maybe Lily should have reacted more to it, but on the whole a good chapter |