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redsfan22002
2009-10-23 . chapter 8
Well, this sure was interesting to say the least.
anonymas
2009-04-21 . chapter 1
i think that so far the story is preety strange but it still has a good cliffhanger
Code Name:X-Lazer
2008-04-02 . chapter 8
Wow!Awesome!My favourite part of the fic is when Tai and Matt told the other Digidesined about the news.I truly like it,and this summer 2008 April I'm gonna see what happened and what is the new face and looks of Kari and TK.And I wish you give me some advice on writing a digimon Fanfic,'cause i'm gonna write my very first digimon fic but i think it'll be long ti'll i can put it on the web and if you write another fic i'll read it if i find it.Bye!Toluloo!And thanks for the fic.
Soldiermon
2007-11-06 . chapter 1
i highly agree with the others you should put up a sequal. you should take a look at my story it's called "young parents" and it's in the rated m section of i would like to see what you think of it
Soldiermon
2007-11-06 . chapter 1
Very good but Tk & Kari should have been Fourteen
digitalmonster911
2007-09-09 . chapter 8
Tell. Me. How. To. Get. To. Sequel. Now.
Cherry Akira Li
2007-07-12 . chapter 8
how sweet please finish the sequel
Steph-DaughterOfTheNite
2007-05-27 . chapter 8
SEQUEL FIRST!
sol badguy
2007-01-05 . chapter 8
there i sat...looking at screen and saw:"...Tai, I'm pregnant...". my heart STOPPED!
as you put it, a wierd fic. but still a good one.
(with TK an Kari, everything seems to go)
you're a good author. and a good person if you ask me. keep up the good work(wich this).

TAKARI4EVER!
Kari Kamyia
2006-11-30 . chapter 8
You Bettr make a new one on New Years Eve because That's My birthday
Aleshia
2006-11-29 . chapter 8
Are You Sure Your Going To Make an endind because you souldn't talk about the story like that because i rally loved it it was so cute i almost cried.
puasluoma
2006-08-05 . chapter 8
Aw so sweet but... 13! oyou could have said 15 or 16! 13! omg
Gosurori-Otaku
2006-07-02 . chapter 8
Kinda...weird...but...I like it...
candice
2006-04-20 . chapter 8
dat was a awesome story. i liked it alot. write the sequel first then follow up with the perquel. anyway
in the sequel make sure there is noisy neigbors reaction. Also how there friends from school react tto the news. write me to let me know when the sequel or perquel is finished. GREAT STORY.
Cezaria
2006-02-01 . chapter 8
Despite I'll probably be flamed for whatever I say. I think it's best if you take a few constructive criticism.

First, you have nearly no description in your story, any description you had was very short and did not give readers are very good idea what's going on. This did improve by the later chapters though.

Also, the story is somewhat illogical. How can the children still act so happy and play around with their digimon when something like this is happening? Do you know how it feels even to SUSPECT that you're pregnant, much less than knowing you definitely are pregnant? Also I think, as possible that TK and Kari could have had sex at 13 years old, TK isn't that irresponsible to do so.

I think you still need more practise at writing stories. Although this might not be bad for a start.
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