Reviews for Fatal Occurrence

Reviews For: Fatal Occurrence

loonytunecrazy 2006-10-16 ch 1,	abuseGreat story
SharanMcQuack 2004-12-21 ch 1,	abuseYou may have hit on WHY Morgana freaks Launchpad out: she reminds him of Magica Despell- especially since Morgana started out as a villianess. also I think Launchpad has o.d. on "weird" lately, what with Splatter Pheonix and slime monsters from Mars and Vampire Potatoes...there's only so more weird one person can take.
Chris 2004-03-05 ch 1, anon.	abuseI think that you should follow up with a wedding story for DW and Morgana.
Brad Eugene Palmer aka Nigh... 2003-03-20 ch 1, anon.	abuseI've been meaning to review this story for a while and I must say I quite thoroughly enjoyed it. I loved seeing Launchpad actually beat Negaduck on his own and I also loved seeing Morg outwit Magica. What I enjoyed the most, however, was the proposal at the end. As a big-time Darkwing/Morgana shipper, seeing that was a big treat for me. I'm not even going to complain about the honest boo-boo concerning story spacing (i.e. not changing paragraphs every time somebody else starts speaking) because 1. as I said, that's a common mistake; one I, myself, have made a few times and 2. the story was enjoyable enough to make that honest boo-boo pretty easy for most fan-fiction writers to overlook.
Mona 2003-02-27 ch 1,	abuseI loved this. :) I once had Magica and Negaduck together in a similar scenario, and also dating. (It does not work out). You got Magica's accent perfectly. The story is so sweet. Good job.
Asuka 2002-03-14 ch 1, anon.	abusecute...i always love dark darling and morg. good job.
Bunny1 2000-12-28 ch 1,	abuseAwww, how sweet!:)
Ghost in the Machine 2000-12-19 ch 1, anon.	abuseLaunchpad beats Negaduck? By himself? I guess all the sidekick training has been paying off. Actually, I enjoyed the story. Nice to have a reference back to Launchpad's prior home. From a technical standpoint, the only bad thing was the huge blocks of text. Only one character should speak per paragraph. Someone else starts speaking, it should be in a new paragraph.
Kalika Storm 2000-12-19 ch 1,	abuseWell... no offence to crash but in defence to ME and YOU Not everybody out ther is as perfect as having only one person talk in one sentence.. Personally that's how I've written since I was in 1st grade and writing my first story, and I'll tell you right now Military teachers don't teach wrong. You can write how you want, and if you want to have 2 people talk in one sentence, then darnit go ahead..cause it's all part of the creative process, and personally I don't think people should critize on HOW people write two people talking at once. Cause if everybody wrote the same way this would be a dan boring place. Web Writer Witch your doing a great job, keep it up and I hope you write more fics cause they're really interesting!.. ~~ Kathy ~*~
Crash 2000-12-19 ch 1, anon.	abuseOne word: Formating. I'll asy it again: (deeper, for emphasis) _Formating._ Formating is your friend. Use it. Good formating means not having two people speak in the same paragraph....... Other than that, you had a decent plot. If you had given it more time, it would have been a decent story. Basically, this story looks like a half-hour eppisode cramed down into a 7-minute segment. To summarize: You've got some good ideas, just work on the formating and make the stories longer so the pacing doesn't seem as rushed.
Mandy of the Amoeba 2000-12-19 ch 1,	abuseHey, I remember this! laughs I remember helping you write Magica's accent. Anyway...good job!

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