|Reviews for Last Chance|
| karat98 8/9/03 . chapter 3
I like this so far! for your first fic, it's really good! I hope I'm not out of my place in pointing out just a quick typo, but in chapter 3 Millie says "Vash come one wake up", when (unless I'm absolutely dense) it aught to be "come on."
Anyway, I love the story so far, I can't wait to read more.
| crystal-chan 8/9/03 . chapter 3
Nice chappy! me likes!
Kay, who shall we steal... hm... *silently walks through the door and creeps to a section labled 'Final Fantasy' while hiding behind house plants, random bishies, and Elapahnts. wait a minute... ELEPHANTS! o.O* Hmm... almost there! *Jumps matrix like into the shadow of the next door* C'mon! the coast is... not clear. Doesn't this remind you of that one thing when you're in Shinra trying to find Aeris and you have to dodge the gaurds... WITH ALL THREE PEOPLE! Um... sorry just that that part got me frustrated. .
I agree! it was so sad Aeris died! My sister still runs around screaming. AERIS DIED! at the top of her lungs just to torment me! Oh the pain, the emotional agony! umm.. yeah..
Good chappy! the dream section was nice and confusing! just like it's suposed to be!
keep it up!
| Dark Fires 8/9/03 . chapter 3
your welcome _ and yes the update was soon enough for me and i hope that the next one comes just as fast.
| feenamon16 8/8/03 . chapter 2
this story is great! there r so many Q's i don't no where to start.
why is vash sick? is it because of the plant or sumthing else? is sum one doing this to him and if so why?
when will meryl and vash tell each other their feelings for each other?
what about millie and nick, when r they going to get together?
also, when r u going to write more!
u r leaving us readers . i can tell this story is going to be really u need any help with the story like for ideas and such just email me. its,
maybe we can talk online sumtime, its always good to have more friends.
| CannonFodder 8/8/03 . chapter 2
I am enjoying this so far and look foward to seeing where it goes from here. Good characterization so far - don't see much OOC at all for any of them. Keep it up!
| crystal-chan 8/7/03 . chapter 2
Yay! go you! . I can't wait for the next chappy!
Yes! TURN UP THE ACTION! WOHO! Oh, and as for cuties that are nice to write angst for... Mwahahahah.
*opens up curtains and shows a door that says 'Bishonens'* We will secretivishly, sneak into this building and steal all the cute guys for our evil purposess! *spins around and is now wearing ninja costume* You in? Heh. we could write a humor fanfic on that. .
Well... Good angst! keep it up! I need more to read! Must... read.. MORE!
| millyfan 8/7/03 . chapter 2
"There will be a little Meryl / Vash sort of worrying in this fic, but this will definitely not be a lemon. It is there because I picture that in their strange sort of non-commitment, but I only want you relationship. Don’t honestly know if I can write the amount of fluff required for a romance story. Anyway, Vash and Wolfwood will probably be the main two characters in this story, just cause I like the pairing. No slash either! Nothing wrong with it if that’s what you like, I simply don’t think I would be any good at writing that either."
You have just said the words I LOVE to hear from a fanfic author, seriously! A fic with Vash and Wolfwood as friends and not yaoi lovers, oh, thank you, thank you *does a happy little dance* You have my respect -.-
As for the fanfic itself, I love it so far. Keep going please -.-
| Dark Fires 8/7/03 . chapter 2
your wellcome _ and i still really like your story (i don't really like slash and i am glad that your not writing a slash fic _)
| crystal-chan 8/5/03 . chapter 1
NO! KEEP GOING! I really like it!
I'm a bit of an angst freak and torturing poor, cute Vash seems like a good idea!
I sort of wish I was as good at Vash at hiding things. man he is GOOD! Keep it up!
| theorangeslime 8/4/03 . chapter 1
You need to write more! _ this will be cool if you do _
| millyfan 8/2/03 . chapter 1
I like it, please keep on going. -.-
| Vash Lover 8/2/03 . chapter 1
Cool! I liked your story and I really think you should continue! Please do!
| Irena K 8/2/03 . chapter 1
"how it was his vault their car was destroyed and therefore his vault" - believe you meant *fault* here, no?
"Senpai" - It's fairly well-established by both the show and the creator of the manga that Trigun takes place on an English-speaking world. You've also already used the translated terms for other signature phrases - such as Wolfwood's "tongari" - so it doesn't make a whole lot of sense to keep this one in Japanese, especialy when an English-speaking gal like Millie wouldn't use it. It's up to you whether you want to use the subed address for Meryl (Ma'am) or the dubbed (Meryl) but do keep in mind that "Senpai" interrupts an otherwise unified whole.
Overall, you've got some small typos here and there but it's an intriguing beginning, one that looks like it'll develope into a nice story. Only one minor word of advice (having seen far too many people called on this) - don't let your readers determine when and if you'll write chapters. Write for yourself and ask advice when you need it but don't hold a story hostage. Too many writers do this for reviews which too often degenerate into "woow! tha wuz so kool!" and I'm one of those readers that's soundly turned off by that. Your writing's fairly solid and you seem much more of the ask-for-advice type than the seeking-worshippers type so I can make an easy exception here but I thought I'd give fair warning.
All right. Enough nits. Go. Write.
| Dark Fires 8/2/03 . chapter 1
i like it and think that u should contine it _