This is definitely a wonderfully written story-I've enjoyed every single word. I hope that some day you decide to finish it.

I'm curious what will happen next. so far this is a very good story but I feel kind of left out. I only saw the movies and don't know much about this universe beside what was shown in them. So I was left in the dark about Padreic. Why does he feel wrong to Ben? Is he some sort of anti-Force alien or something else? This seems to be the last chapter he appears in so I suppose I will never get the answers to my questions.

I've finished chapter one. Interesting start. Calling the imperial troops imps was a little jarring because of the existing connotations of that word. Was that on purpose?

I'm liking it so far.

One thing bothered me though. Ben's thoughts in the beginning of the chapter don't sound like the thoughts of someone who grew up his whole life in this small settlement. They sound more like the thoughts of a big city dweller who moved there and really likes it. He has an informed outsider perspective.

Of course, I should have known that the guy at the end of chapter 2 would end up being Han Solo. I'm really glad to see him in this fic, he's probably my favourite character. I'm really curious to see what happened to make Luke turn to the darkside. I'm wondering if it's something Han did, and that's why he's out looking for Han now. It's kind of interesting how everything can change so much, just because one character ended up being evil instead of being a good guy.

As I mentioned before, I also like the parallels between Ben and a young Luke Skywalker, both ordinary guys living on Tatooine, both receiving a transmission that sends them off on an adventure, and both with the potential to become Jedi.

I cannot figure out who Padreic might be - I know he's important, though. I'm pretty sure I know who Ben's father is, but I won't say it here. ;)

And you've left us on a cliffhanger. I really hope you haven't abandoned this story... :(

Another wonderful line: "For a moment Ben felt very sorry for the poor freighter. Then he realized he was sympathizing with a flying deathtrap and hastily put that thought out of his head." You really do have a way with words. As for the ending of this chapter: oh no.

I love how Ben finds the positive in that "he /really/ didn't like flying." That made me smile. I also really liked how Han compares Ben with young Luke. I think you got Han's character spot on here.

I feel sorry for Ben - he really doesn't want to be a Jedi or a hero; he just wants to live a quiet life, but that won't happen of course.

I found one spelling/grammar error:

"Dangerously naive thought Commander Skywalker might have been" - "thought" should be "though."

Oh no. I see history repeating itself more and more. This is a masterful job of following the basic plotline of "A New Hope" without just copying it wholesale. I love it.

Have I mentioned that I love the "quotes" at the top of each chapter. I'm assuming you make these up - very creative.

And you managed to have someone say, "I have a bad feeling about this." Awesome. That made me smile. :)

I found a couple of typos in this chapter.

"because it there was one thing Ben had learned working in the family garage" - should be "if there was one thing..."

"It would have been fairly to disperse them" - needs another word: easy?

This is getting more and more interesting. Padreic has really got me guessing. There's definitely more to him than merely an odd job man. And the other man he talked to in the bar is even more mysterious. You didn't even tell us if he's human.

This is so well-written; I can't believe how few reviews you've gotten. Your writing creates detailed pictures in my head, and your characterizations are amazing, especially Ben, who is fascinating.

I love these lines:

"eyes that might have been called laser-green if they had belonged to someone more interesting"

"Normally he wasn't the sort of person to be interested in strange transmissions, because they were the sort of things that only happened in holodramas and he'd always found the idea of reading them rather rude"

I loved the "bizarre lazer cutter" in Old Kenobi's hut. Brilliant.

I like the introduction of new characters here. Padreic is most likely going to end up being someone extremely important, I'm guessing, and we already know that there's more to him than meets the eye, and that he's probably more dangerous than he looks. I'm curious to know who the man is at the end of the chapter, but I have a feeling that we'll find out soon enough. I like how this story kind of parallels that of episode IV, where the plot starts off with a transmission that gets all the characters involved in some big and epic adventure. It'll be interesting to find out what's on the transmission and why the Empire wants it so bad.

This is an interesting start to the story. I kind of like the idea of how Ben is an average, somewhat boring (in his cousin's opinion) character, who just wants to live an ordinary life and has to real dreams of granduer or anything like that. But of course, fate has different things in store for him.

I like the description of Draco's Well, and the description of Mos Espa where terrible things happen. It liked the "Or worse" because it builds some tension early in the story. I also really liked the alternative version of the story of Kenobi and Luke Skywalker, where instead of Obi-Wan being seen as a great mentor, he's depicted as a kidnapper. And the fact that Ben found a red lightsabre, rather than a blue or green one, suggests something more ominous than we originally thought.

Great job! I'm very interested to see where this story goes.

... Holy crap. I got to say, I'm loving this story thus far. The gentle way you're nudging the story along, the ever increasing ebb and flow of emotions and tension... it's glorious. Ben and Sasha arguing back and forth at the beginning of the chapter? Pure gold. Especially the "you're /crazy/." bit, because less then a minute later, Ben was mentally agreeing with her.

Speaking of Sasha... I seriously wanted to hug her when she heard the news. T_T You have a definite grasp of emotionally expressing your story. That is to say, you convey your emotions, the reactions of your characters, and what not, in convincing and believable ways. Ben knew he and Sasha couldn't afford to stand around wallowing in their misery. The next objective, the next place. Just keep moving. We can rest, we can mourn, when this is over.

And the fact that he's willing to do just about anything to keep her at least somewhat happy..? Glorious. This honestly feels like it could be a canon story. It's that well written and told. I'm also wondering who the guy is at the end, though I have a feeling it might be Han. We shall see though, yes? _

So, I'm starting this review from a quarter of the way into the chapter. Why? Because it looks to be kinda big, and I dun wanna forget anything.

Okay! So thus far, I love the setting you've set for the story. The time and description you've put into Draco's Well pretty glorious, and in a way... in a way, it makes me think of The Shire, only more... desert-y. :P

Out of the way, of of space and time, and on the back side of no where. Peaceful, in many ways. That's the feeling I get of Draco's Well, and I can see why Ben loves it. Though the minute he got the transmission... oh, I had to take a moments chuckle, facepalm, and feel sorry for the boy. things like this, /never/ end well. I hope it wont be /too/ bad, like with what happened to Luke at the beginning of episode 1(4, whatever you wanna call it).

Kay, so just finished the second bit. This "Or worse" is making me slightly nervous, and I love the air of tension that is starting to build. Not to heavy, but it's presence is definitely /there/ and can be felt. I like the rhythm, the ebb and flow of the story thus far. Great characterization in all his family members.

Part three: Oh gawd. I loved this part. I dunno why, there was just so much... awesomeness in it. That spike of tension, that moment of /oh god it's them/... superbly done. And I really mean that. Plus the emotion coming from Sasha, and the way Ben knows, going home is the absolute worst thing he can do right now. Which is a very interesting, and realistic way to do things. When you're little more then a country bumpkin with a dinked up blaster carbine against not one, not two, but /three/ troop transport ships, full of Imperial Stormtroopers? What the hell do you expect to do aside from scuff their armor, then die? No, Ben made the right call in this one, in my eyes. Sasha can hate him all she wants, but he might have just saved her life. -nods-

final part: -cackles- OH GAWD. THE LIGHTSABER. WHY IS IT RED? XDDDD And the cloaks... gah. We all know what it is. Great foreshadowing here. Honestly, all over, this is an amazing first chapter, and I really enjoyed it. I can't wait to see what's in the next chapter! _

Keep up the great work!