I was directed to this story through a review, since I wrote one rather similar to yours. I rather enjoyed yours, although it was kinda sad (I prefer to think that Ranma and Akane get together in the end, especially since Takahashi says they do). Excellent storytelling though, and your idea of telling it from Akane's pooint of view rather than Ranma's was certainly an original idea.

If you'd like to read mine, it can be found in the Ranma archives under the title "Coffee Talk". Great minds think alike I guess!

-Doc

I thought that that was a very insightfull look into Naru and Keitaro's relationship. There were a few places that needed comma's but it was still pretty well written. And in the last part of the Author's Notes, you said "volumes 10-15". I thought there were only fourteen, or is there a bonus issue that hasn't made it stateside yet? Can you please in any way, answer me back about this, if it is at all possible. Thanks.

is that the hole story if it was im very sad bacuase the way it ended i think you should make more chp to it so that the story is not a bad one like this story but it needs more to it

Pretty good.

Very good. I liked it a lot! This Akane/Naru idea was great!

I would like to thank you. I'm glad someone picked up on the idea and ran with it. My friends and I often point out similarities in different anime, especially relationships. Also, I think you did a good job with dialogue and how the character's related.

Thanks

Love the way its going! keep it up!

Very nice little fic, just the right amount of angst thrown in. I really liked the story - it was of very good quality. I hope more folks read and review this one for you.

VERY NICE. THE DRAMA AND ROMANCE WERE WELL WRITEN. THIS STORY WAS VERY ENJOYABLE TO READ. I HOPE TO SEE SOMETHING LIKE THIS AGAIN SOON FROM YOU.


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