...is she a Clifa fan? it was...how should i explain this?...weird? or boring? I don't really know...

wow.. this story is interesting! =) i love ViNCENT/TiFA fanfictions. keep going! update a chapter please =)

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Dare I venture from the terrible and seemly depths of the Vincent/Yuffie stories to Vincent/Tifa? I never thought I would have to, but this story...it... *chokes* I suppose this review is aimed towards your sister then? Why doesn't your sister get her own account? Whatever. Feel free to email her this.

First off, it would be nice if your prologue was more than a few sentences. You can keep it as brief as you like, but using it as a standalone for a chapter is pointless. You might as well just add those few lines to the beginning of your chapter one.

Your grammar is terrible. Do you know what a period is? The period is a handy little tool authors use to end sentences with. You should try it sometime. Who knows? You may even like it. Also, try to use dashes (-) or underscores (_) (or whatever you feel so inclined to use) to indicate when one scene ends and another begins. Your first paragraph, for example, awkwardly switches to the next without any breaks. It's about Tifa, then suddenly Vincent's there.

Now to your plot... Or as I like to call it: "the reason to why I love what I do". This is, well, terrible. What is Vincent? A dog? He obeys his master and follows after her when she's in trouble, hearing her cries from afar! Go Lassie, go! This is AU, correct? Label it as such, would you? It makes more sense that way... More in-depth information would be nice, as well. Perhaps you should extend your prologue and get more into the whole Barret-selling-Tifa thing. I didn't know Barret likes to sell his daughters to pay off gambling debts, but hey, we all have hobbies (and gambling debts to pay).

In short, redo this. There's enough God-awful Vincent/Yuffie stories out there, we don't need that shite to spread into Tifa/Vincent.
--daous

hey i like it so far :) update ! i wanna see where the story is going :) keep it up!

Wow, this is pretty good! How old is your sister? This is a really good story!^^

Sorta like all those movies where the woman isn't happy with the man she married and falls in love with someone else and they run off and play hookie. I can't wait until you(or your sister) update again!

Tell her to hurry up!^-^

Until then!

Sincerely,
DragonGirl323

WOnderful Marvoiulous

Hey! This sounds like it's going to be interesting! I encourage you keep writing SassyAngel's sis. Please? ^_- I'm curious and interested! I absolutely love reading and writing Vin/Tif, so keep it comin!
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Write your heart. Write your soul. Write on!
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Jess 0:o)

This sounds so good.

Will it ever be written? x_x

I'm looking forward to seeing how this turns out!

full speed ahead!

Heh i dont want name myself as a Vin/tifa fan( i also liek seph/tifa and im begining to hate Ruf/Tifa) if you add maybe more than 800 words per chapter (just to hook in more readers) then you have a good story to write. I agve my confidence for ya so try to make chapter to get ya readers. Really i mena the plot for the story sounds nice.