Intresting story! You can write better stories than me, but I just wanted to tell an advice: USE RETURN (The key) OFTEN AND MAKE YOUR TEXT CLEARER TO READ!
Thanks,
math-man250

Great story. I like the last scene in this chapter.

EV5- hey, this is the EV universe, after all. You see ships flaming up in the game! But, yeah, that's unrealistic.

Dash? Dash Riprock? Aww, you can't kill him. That's my most favorite pilot name in the default choices. Good chapter.

Ah! It's a pain in the #% to edit your documents so they look good on the internet.

Indenting is hard as hell with HTML, and formatting is hard as hell when your just using Word.

#$%!

Interesting story. Something feels odd about the way that he would suddenly turn against the war... logically, he would have seen crew killed and entire UE Cruisers destroyed before. Not that major, though.

First i found some thing un realstic in this story the fire there can't be space there is no oxygen and fire needs oxygen too live_/