I absolutely love this! You take such a small scene and give it so much depth and feeling and texture. And the thought process you give Seifer is perfect, this *is* what is going on in his head for me. And you execute your concept brilliantly, this could be the hundredth time or the thousandth.

Just

Wow, really the only ever piece that could be interpreted as Seifer/Zell I could ever imagine reading that didn't make me want to throw up from the implausibleness. In fact, this is amazing. I completely get it.

*laughs* I love this!

cute

Neat fic.

Hey, Bacon. It's the Dragon. Liked your story. I really like stories that take a little something in the game that you might not see or might not care about since it's really insignificant to the plot and just tell a shorty about it. Very nice.

~The Golden Dragon, whose wings are broken

That was great! Little vignettes are always good for a quick read. The quote was a nice touch. I didn't realize to the end that the quote really had to do with both Zell *and* Seifer. So that's pretty interesting. Hmm. . . a bit of incognito SeiferxZell ^o^.

Well anyway this fic embodies Fujin, Raijin and Seifer both as the Dicsiplinary Committee and as a posse. And I'm glad Raijin didn't really talk much. His constant 'ya know's always get under my skin.

Keep writing!

What I liked about this: firstly, how this was a well-crafted vignette that subtly but somehow *perfectly* captured Seifer’s entire personality. A few well-placed italics here and there, attention paid to the little details, and Seifer’s world comes alive for us, even if he is only standing in the cafeteria. I remember this scene in the game well, but you’ve certainly managed to bring an entirely refreshing color and life to it.

Also – I absolutely loved the quote at the beginning. I laughed because it fit too perfectly. Oh, and the review you left me in my last piece? Totally undeserved. I’m blushing, here. ^_^ Anyway, another fabulous piece by you. Very glad you’re back. :)

I definitely like - you took an original scene from the game and really made it come alive. Seifer's great, totally realistic and in character, and I love the word emphasis with italics. And the quote's perfect. All in all, nice job. :)

Great story. I like how it turned out. I think you did a pretty good job with Seifer's personality, and what he thought. Good good, I wanna see another chapter!

Assuming that this is actually the first review fot he peice and Fanfiction.net isn't just not letting me see them 'cause it's a jerk, I'm doing the First Reply Dance.

This was a fantastic one-shot. It's an excellent in-game look that builds upon the actual piece and gives a clear, in-character look at what Seifer was thinking--including expounding a bit on the interrelationship between him and Zell. If you /look/ you can really see the move from amusement to annoyance, and if you don't you're just swept up in it and /you can feel it, too./ All in all, awesome work.

Now go write more.

I laugh. "Insanity: doing the same thing over and over again and expecting different results." I didn't really notice that quote until I had read the whole thing.
That's the perfect reason for Seifer to have been motivated to shake up Garden and try to take over the world: just because he was bored.

You're amazing.

I've read your fanfics, and you never fail to amaze me with your perfect characterization and character interaction.

This was such a great fic, I loved how Seifer thought of Zell while Zell was walking off. It's just so ...perfect. ...Them. I love it.

I realized that in a fic that I'd written recently that some of the scenes in it are really similar to some in VIGIL. I totally did not realize that until I reread it yesterday. You would not believe how much I felt the blood drain out of my body. I am so sorry, I worked very hard and didn't read any fics while I was working on it, I didn't intend anything by it, except maybe that your writing has been buried in my subconsious...

Er... I'll stop ranting now. Anyway, I enjoyed the fic very much, and hope you'll contine to write so wonderfully. ... Please excuse my fan-ness. -Lane

I like this story :)

I especially liked the way that certain words are in italics to really emphasise how annoyed Seifer is.

But best of all, I really, really liked Seifer's characterisation. I'm glad that you didn't twist his personality and pin him as a out-of-control-deranged freak. Instead, Seifer is a calm person. He may be capable of violent outbursts, but as you've shown, he is willing to hide his annoyance to maintain his image as a no-nonsence, "disciplined" leader. For example, when Fujin and Raijin were bickering, Seifer "wasn't really paying attention".

I also liked the subtle hints you gave of Seifer being almost "attracted" to Zell. Although I would interpret his attempts to chase down the martial artist as simply a tactic to quell his boredom (after all, Seifer is beginning to find his spars with Squall becoming rather tedious), there is that undeniable indication of attraction. Take for example, when Seifer stressed that "this time Dincht wasn't going to ignore him", again, certain words ('this' and 'wasn't') are in italics and in my opinion, this probably offers a small insight into the other possible motives for Seifer to initiate the chase.

Otherwise, this story is very well written and certainly original, as I haven't read any other FF8 fanfics quite like it. Keep up the good work.