I know, far too late for this likely to be of use but I shall review anyway.
I liked the story, the plot line was aptly interesting, but the writing style of this fic is in need of work.
Your characterization is actually rather good, it needs some enhancing perhaps but is fine.
You must work on your use of adjectives and on the creation of scenes, moods, and characterization through use of literary devices such as imagery. There are various moments where you chose to list details such as the appearance of certain things, certain events, or as in once case you even provided a mini-map. Not a terrible thing, but it takes away from the quality of the story. When you wish your readers to visualize things don't take such short-cuts or seek to list. Sometimes subtle hinting or even omition works better than listing.
Also related is your need for sentence variation. You begin things fairly well but tend to write your sentences all in similar structure and content. When showing details or introducing things into the plot use various techniques to express what you desire and not only one or two so that your story may have a better flow.
Important events must be more carefully introduced and often need not be stated directly but hinted at through actions, the thoughts of the characters, their interactions, observations, body language or lack of it, the mood created, and lastly dialogue.
Such as if you wish to express a growing relationship you need not write in a sudden love or some such but perhaps a moment where one character observes a sudden beauty in their love and perhaps brushes a hand and gets a bush in reaction or some such. For a better idea check the work of a favorite novelist.

Such things aside, the story was generally enjoyable and I can only think your work has improved by leaps and bounds since this was written and thus perhaps made most of my commentary unnecessary.

This is... SO AWESOME! It was all too good to be true...
Except the deaths, of course, poor Inuyasha... T_T
Well, anyway, I love it ^-^

this is a really great story that i read before and i'm glad i found it again cause its still great and i really like it and love it alot your a really great author who wrote this really great amazing wonderful story.

i give this 5 out 5 stars

this one i read a long time ago i'm glad i found your story again because this one i really like cause i read it more then once and it's really good it's also my favorite.

keep up the good work

Fantastic. There is no other way to describe this. Absolutely fantastic.

Domo arigato for this amazing read.

Saki

Fantastically written! I'm really happy you put a vocabulary list at the bottom. So many authors don't and it makes the story hard to read. You're grammar was fantastic, I've had people consistently miss spell bowl as "boll"

this is such a great story!! it was sad though!

Sorry, I would've submitted a signed review, but my stupid computer won't log me in. It's a great story, by the way.

i agree that this story is VERY similair to that book, but she didn't marry yasha now did she? nope. he DIED!! she lived with sesshy boy!!

Yuri is so KAWAII!! i am sad that kagome won't realise her heritage but it is good story! on my faves!! ^.^

I LOVED this story! I stayed up all night reading it because I couldn't get enough! All though it was kind of sad that the others had to die it was still a happy ending! BTW do you know where I can buy the book you got the idea from?
-Lautice ^_^

so inu does love kag but he wants her to be happy so he let her be with his bro? aw thats so sweet! i think he shud fall in love with that little elf girl though that would be cute! =)

AWSOME!lol