"We do not steal. We commandeer." Love that! What's Jack's plan? Knowing him, it's something stupid, crazy and guaranteed to work.

Jill is seriously nuts. That is awesome! And you write it so well!

It is a bloody miracle that Jack always seems to keep his hat. I think he loses it once and then finds it again. I love that. And Jack has a point- he hasn't ever been caught(at least, not for good). I also like how Jack's idea of whether or not a man would be good for Elizabeth is whether or not he would be a good pirate. And oh my god, is Jack going to corrupt Will and Elizabeth's unnamed daughter? That would be so funny! Wow, I wrote a lot... This chapter was really good!

Crazy as a loon. I love how Jack describes things!

I love that you gave Jack not only a sister, but a ruthless pirate twin sister. Jill is awesome! Did Jack really steal the compass from her? That does sound like him...

I agree with Will- Captain Jack Sparrow is synonymous with insane.

Don't forget to give Jack some rum! Awesome opening.

UM...HEY. Again.
Eh, it wasn't bad. I just don't think you're the kind of author I'm looking for--and that's ok. There's a ton of people that probably would LOVE this fic; I'm just not one of them.
SO DON'T FEEL BLUE!
For me, it just didn't flow as well as it could have. But maybe I'm just really tired.
Who knows?

COL! I can't wait for more! Usually Jack and sister stories have them having great relationships... or Jack is overprotective. This is a great change from the ordinary!

I just started this story... the thought of Jack having a sister? A twin sister no less...

Man, I feel for her... it's wrong for her to like her brother... that sucks...

But does she have to be evil? And a little loony...

I wanna know the plan...

if this is still going...

I can hardly wait for the next chapter

oh oh! I'll review. out of 10, 50. Really good, but don't make me wait too long for the next one;)

Poor abused Jacob. Jill really is a terror!
Again, your character deveoplments are perfectly worked in. And nice dialouge! Also, wonderful vocabulary. You manage to sound intelligent and polished without sounding like you got a case of what my 6th grade teacher called "thesouisitis". :-P
Cannot wait for the next chapters. Bloody enjoyable to read, really. Keep it up!

Poor Jacob...Good writin' though ;-) Keep at it!

Will nodded, appearing just as serious as Jack when he’d started the tale, but Elizabeth appeared about as disbelieving as if he’d told her he was really her father reincarnated… fifty years in the past.

Oh man, that was great. Love the bit with the shark. Keep it coming!!

“Oh, that compass! That Isla de Muerta!” She nodded her head in encouragement, smile stretching so far now that it barely fit the confines of her face anymore. Scary, really.

ROFL!

Oh jeez, that was great, bloody brilliant! I LOVE how you ended off the chapter too, personalities dead on!