I really liked that. Today, I reread that part of the manga where the two meet and somehow, it also fascinated me. Sanosuke was taken down so easily, though I found it very unfair that Saito hit his wound twice. But Sano, my favorite character BTW, to be dominated so easily - at least it seems so - in a battle...

well...

well done! =3

o, nice. good insight and awesome descriptions. I especially love the part where Saitou's "true face [stares] through." "The angles sharpen, the mouth thins, and a fighter's stance and build become visible beneath the peddler's disguise." And then the eyes... I was completely enthralled, and by a few words too! You're very talented

A glimpse of a very talented writer.I really felt involved in the scenes.

More to come!

Very interesting and very good. Great job.

I've got two reasons to say wow here. Why? Well firstly it isn't a harcore Yaoi Sano/Saito fic, which is what I usually see lurking around for these two men (well Saito sure is a man of power IMO and I don't blame Yaoi fangirls for writing him a lot in lemons ^^;;) and secondly because in small sentences, you were able to capture Sanosuke's thoughts quickly with ease. Each sentence I see is punchy and clear and I can imagine myself standing next to Sanosuke, feeling the intensity he has towards Mr Narrow Eyes himself. I'm not sure what else to say but other than express my surprise at how nice this story is ^_^;;