"So I’m standing on the corner of Takeshita St, wearing an orange top hat and holding a guitar. I’ve never played a guitar in my life. If the target asks me to play it for him, I’m totally screwed."

I LOVE IT!

The whole chapter!

"I go back to drawing spider webs around the corners of Ken’s eyes with purple eyeliner."

I so want their job! Well, not the end part of the chapter. Unless it's looking up for them in the next chapter.

I wonder if they're going to blame this all on Aya and Yohji when it's all said and done. And I'm being totally random and hyper. Too much sugar, ya think?

Anyway, thrilled that you updated, and patiently waiting for more!

I'm glad to see you're dealing with the problems of having a relationship and trying to do the work that they do and be objective about it.

Barbara

..you know I love you dearly, right?

...I may still have to kill you for leaving off like this though... Jerk.

Oh my ** god! what are you doing? To them? To me? I loved Omi's POV! There are rarely people who write him that well!

I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter. Aya's reactions and internal monologue were perfectly...Aya. Yohji was also perfect; I could visualize him so clearly from Aya's perspective. I especially liked the ending where Yohji is purposely not being low key, but in the end becomes more subtle. As always, your way with description and dialogue is amazing. Looking forward to more!

Okay this has to be the CUTEST chapter of them all! I absolutely loved it!

You've captured Aya and Yohji perfectly. Aya's self commentary perfectly illistrates what I would imagine him to be thinking in this situation. It's beautiful the way he is opening up to Yohji, one small step at a time. And your Yohji is so wonderfully full of bravado but still so fragile on the inside. Thankyou so much for another fantastic chapter.

"I dream that I’m being strangled by a giant mutant cephalopod."
I HAD TO QUOTE THAT, SINCE I HAVE A BABYSHOWER-BET THAT I WOULD ACTUALLY KEEP CAPS LOCK ON FOR THREE WEEKS. I SHALL NOT FAIL!
SO. UHUM. BACK TO TOPIC.
THAT LINE ABSOLUTELY KILLED ME AND KEPT ME GIDDY FOR THE ENTIRE CHAPTER.
HONESTLY, I HAVE WITNESSES. I WAS TALKING TO MY FRIENDS ON SKYPE, AND I KEPT. ON. GIGGLING.
SERIOUSLY, IT WAS SO INCREDIBLY ANNOYING, THAT JACK VERBALLY SLAPPED ME AND ASKED IF I WAS HAVING A SEIZURE.
SO I SENT HIM A LINK TO THE STORY.
AND YOUR PROFILE.
AND YOUR OTHER STORIES.
AND WE BOTH HAD MULTIPLE SEIZURES.
THEN BEN AND ANN JOINED.
THEY SLAPPED.
THEY GOT LINK.
THEY SEIZURED.
YOU, MY GOOD MAN SLASH WOMAN, HAVE JUST BOMBARDED MY EYES WITH AWESOME RAYS AND PREVENTED ME FROM EVER SEEING ANYTHING ELSE THAN FLUORESCENT COLOURS, LIKE I'M BLOODY /HIGH/ OR SOMETHING. HONESTLY, IF I WOULD NOT WEAR SHADES RIGHT NOW, I'D BE PERMANENTLY BLINDED.
SO I'M JUST GOING TO /NOT/ DO THE SMART THING, AND WILL BE TOO LAZY AND TIRED TO GET SHADES.
YES, IT IS NOW FIVE IN THE MORNING.
YOU GAVE ME A NEW WILL TO GO TO SCHOOL IN THE AFTERNOON.
YES, I TAKE AFTERNOON CLASSES.
DAYUM PREGNANCY SLASH UTERUS-EATING BABY.
RAWR.
I HOPE THE CAPS LOCK DID NOT BURN YOUR EYES. YOU NEED THOSE FOR WRITING/MAKING MORE OF MY DAYS.

HOSHEET, ALMOST 1500 CHARACTERS. THAT'S PRETTY AWESOME OF ME, EVEN IF I HAVE TO SOUND CONCEITED WHILE FINALLY ADMITTING MY LONGLY SUPRESSED AWESOMENESS.

EHEHEHE.

~MARY-JANE

HAH. OVER 1500 CHARACTERS. TAKE THAT, ME!

KEN! Oh, this was good! I love the way you write him, in all his quirky, distracted, and self-conscious glory. No, Ken, Aya and Yohji are too busy to notice that you've got "I've got a crush on Omi" written all over your forehead, and NO, you shouldn't get Omi FLOWERS!

Love the way you swung it from humorous to serious again, as well!

Looking forward to more!

Well, once you got the boy to cooperate, Ken actually did really well. He's so adorable. I think he's my favorite POV in terms of voice and style.

And, poor boy. Poor, innocent Ken. No, Aya and Yohji are, surprisingly, doing even more interesting things than you are.

The twist at the end...hooboy. I'm a bit nervous. Hopefully Ken and Omi can work it out a bit. Hopefully.

Wow. I don't even know whose POV I want to see next now...I figure it'll be Aya, but...you've managed to get the Ken/Omi storyline somewhere interesting too, so...wow.

Ahem. Fangirling aside, I think your writing is still amazing. Can't wait to see the next update~

aww stupid sweet adorable Kenken! And poor Boys... I was really happy to see you posted another chapter! YAY!

D:
*wail*
NOES!
Finally, when they're all happy and lovey-dovey, you, the evil author, comes in and just /has/ to ruin their luck D:
...
Is it normal to laugh this much during a perfectly serious chapter?
I hope it was, 'cause I laughed my ** off.
I SURE DID 8D EHEH.
I was so happy you updated, that I just started flailing uncontrollably until my friend had to slap me.
UHUM.
Moving on.
Once again, I'm going to try expressing my love for you.
HERE! HAVE AN ORANGE!
8D
Mission succeeded.

~Mary-Jane

Oh. I love this. I'll have to re-read it, it's been awhile since I read the earlier chapters. I'm glad that you gave us the link for the extended version; it's totally worth it. Very erotic. I love how you write Aya and Yohji. I'm excited to read move of this! I hope that you show us an expansion of Ken and Omi's developing romance as well! :3

I really hope you're writing more. :)

Hehehe... Right. I loved the --"Yohji…drank himself unconscious while reading my book? I’m…not quite sure what that means."-- I think that's a very dubious compliment indeed. (smirks)
I definitely liked the little more happy introspection Aya did wile visiting Aya-chan. Somehow the whole chapter seemed much less... Angsty. Although I loved this little bit of pondering a lot:

"I’m not sure because I’ve spent such a ** long time trying to live for my sister that I’m no longer sure anymore where my own feelings end and where I’m just projecting."

Somehow I never read a fic where they brought that up and it seems so very logical that he'd blame his attraction to yohji on that. Well, at least that he'd TRY to.
And the remark about the charms was brilliant, gehehe. (--"Just another verification that I have to go back to Yohji. I need more charms."--)

Thanks again. I'm looking forward to the next one. ^_-

X Wolfje