YC: Wow, this was good. Very good. Interesting concept and presented very well. And showing the relationship between Oriya and Muraki is always nice. Not enough good fics going around like this. Loved it!

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After getting into X/19 and attempting to watch the series, I thought I had my fill of sakura references ... even if they were based out of another fandom.

However! You have proved me wrong.

This is a lovely story. I adore the characterization of Oriya here, the inclusion of Hisoka, and, heck, I even love Muraki, even if his emotions disturb me just a little bit. ^_^;

I love how obscure some parts of the story are -- how you leave much open to interpretation, explaining just enough to fill in any holes but leave the picture largely to the reader to fill in.

You managed to be descriptive without killing adjectives -- more metaphor and analogy rather than using ten different words to describe the color of blood.

Very nice. I hope to read more of your work.

actualli juz taking diz chance to tell you dat i really lyk all your stories. they're really great and i love your style, which is so fluid and smooth :)

this is so nice! i never see Oriya potrayed in this light before, it suits him. To think that he is willing to die for Muraki, the sakuras and all...its just beautiful. Good job=)

Wow...that was lovely. I adore Oriya and it's nice to see fanfic about him for one. Very beautifully written and so sad...

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I was a second away of crying. The concept is great, and I was wondering why hadn't it been used. Muraki does care for Oriya, and we all know it, and Oriya would surely die for him. Most unnusual, I must say, I had a dream about this story a few nights ago..

Anyway, I think your the actual narration gets a little too confusing, since you are using a present time in third person. Not that it isn't interesting, but some parts seem like a little messed up, or like the narration turns more into a separated comment. I believe that can be improved to make it more fluent, but its just my point of view.

I loved your story. Hadn't read anything that got me that close to crying in months. So, keep it going!

Lovely metaphors, interesting ideas, and great characterization. It's a gem of a fic. :)

Beautiful irony! There are very few Oriya fics that write him so well; this one is one of the best.

A fascinating idea and a beautifully tragic fic. Good job!