A good start on the first chapter. You have a few grammar mistakes, other than that it's good.

the last part of this chappie reminds me of one part of fushigi yuugi hehe lol

cool!

I've only read the beginning of your story but I like it. As with all other stories that I like I try to find the elements that make it unique. Yours has the fact that no matter how much time passes and no matter how many people accept you, you still have to accept yourself. However like in other stories that I like I find that many times I can't concentrate on the story itself because I run into so many spelling errors that I then have to decipher.

I guessing you haven't gone through and check all your mistakes bu I find this type-o halarious. You typed:

Her creamy skin, her powerful but genital eyes, her hair that shone like silk.

Didn't you mean Powerful but gental eyes? Haha :D

uh what pairing is this i cant really tell anymore i mean tis so confusing

This is a really good story, and I am glad you made a sequel.

*sniffle* the ending was truly touching. You did a fantastic job. Bravo! *sniffle* It truly was touching!

er...just have to aske...do you not lke Kagome, what with your begginging sequences and ending commentary?

About your vocabulary issue...if you ever need to know anything Japanese, go to It works realy well!

I know yor done with this story but, it rocks still!

yay i am going to read your sequel now

nice! good work

It NOT kama- It IS KAMI!

Kami-God

baka means stupid. Urameshi! Higurashi! Kuwabara just as you spelled it!

You are Obssed with sesshomaru and should be sent to a mental hospital cuz they r both fictional characters so really u do not own kurama or sess.

And its not kama its KAMI meaning means idoit which you URAMESHI,Higurashi And must be a female with an iQ the size of a tiny dot