Great STORY! REALLY KEWL! I LOVE IT! Continue writing stories like this one. they're very interesting!

yeahh! very great! i remember reading this story on jafd before i read it here! jafd roxs! anyway! thanxs for the update!:):):):) oh creepy!
-jkk

wah. that was a sad story :_(. sad but very nicely written!

Wow. That was an amazing beginning. PLEASE WRITE MORE!

very good. but what's the contest response is it? i vaguely remeber something like that but...if you wouldn't mind clearing that up for me. by the way, your stories brilliant so far..but what's happening? i think you should explain a bit more as to what's going on. eg: what mission was Obi on?, who was that woman who was frightened and why was the mansion attacked?