This is pretty good.its better than my fics are ( Of course thats the reason i never posted them)

This was great! I loved it!

Are you going to write more?

Oh my, this is one of the best pieces I have read yet on ! Your writing is clear and flowing, it really draws the reader in! I love how you keep the piece moving instead of repetitively dwelling on one aspect of the angst as many authors tend to do.
Wonderful, do write more!

I like it. It goes through a big range of emotion, and it sets it up well. Are you a Christian? Just curious. Anyways, I really do like it. Hm.

I hope he does take the chance. He should. he can. He must.

Oh, Lyona, put simply I love this. It is a fantastic peice of work, excruciatingly IC and tackling the dilema that most people don't even realise exists between Artemis and Timmy.
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Artemis's independance and thoughts on such... Timmy's assumptions, the implications that he thinks of his son as a child who is still able to be manipulated... Artemis as a hero already, without his father's help or by acting as Timmy-miniture... Artemis not respecting his father's words at face value, the questioning of intelligent adolescence...
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*loffs excessively on the fic, and holds it tight*
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This really is a fantastic peice of work. I'll add it to my Fav. Stories list which is severely unupdated of late, and Author Alert as well, because I don't want to miss another masterpeice like this.
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~Yeti

I loved it! Youre a really good writer, I like your style. I never really thought of that...although it seems possible for Artemis to think those things.

It's a really nice piece of work. And if this is your first time, well... then I'll cower at your feet when you're experinced. It's not that emotional, I've read some that make you want to cry when you're done, like Unrequited, which is the only slash story that I like. Not that I'm saying that you're a bad writer or any thing. Now I have to go and ramble on to some other poor writer out there whos story I wanted to reveiw. And if you would like to reply to my reveiw, E-mail me at Fairy_Cards@hotmail.com. I just love to get reveiws/E-mails.

YOu say this is your first fanfic, but it's easy to see that you're not new to writing. Considering that Artemis is just exploring possibilities, you've created a very interesting item that far outstrips the usual action stories and sequels that are based on the orginal series. This just fits Artemis's character wonderfully, and your style has a unique flow.