You have a good idea, but you are trying too hard to make this story epic. First, eliminate the bits with fate and don't significantly change the trials that Ranma has to face. Second, show the story instead of telling it; by this I mean you should always try to err on the side of being too descriptive, you can always remove things slowing the story down later. For example, what you made the second paragraph should be at least three paragraphs if not the entire prologue - especially if you ever intend to introduce any more charactors from the Zelda world that Saria would all ready know later. You are aware your grammar needs work, so I won't say anything further on the subject. I would like to see this fic continued and expanded.

Nabiki or Kasumi... THere are planty of Akane fics. How is Saria dealing with all this?

I say Ranma with Saria. I'm not a fan of ranma paired with any tendos and ranma with a twndo whould ruin this story.

-Correct grammar is your friend
-Correct punctuation is your friend
-Correct capitilization is your friend

Seriously, there's no reason for this to be so horrible. Did you actually read what you wrote? How old are you, 8? Everything seems spelled ok, so there's one plus, but beyond that this is a total bastardization of English.

-Joshua

I like the concept, in that there a few points I can see being nice to use.
The good
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A Zelda/Ranma Xover
Saria being in love with link
The ending joke

the bad
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The grammar is bad
Saria has no good explanation for her feelings and how they came to be and why she cant be with link
Did you forget about the period? It is a very useful object used to signify the ending to a sentence, not a hyphen.
All the talkings jumbled up
No details to how all reactions to saria are

The indifferent
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Ranma didnt get pulled into hyrule, that was what I thought would first happen.

So I like the fics plot so far but wish it was done much better and executed nicer.