I'll have you know that i'm thoroughly enjoying this against my will.

I just started to write a Patrician/OFC fanfic of my own and decided to check out the competition, as it were.

Thoroughly disconcerting to find one so superior to my own. I'll have to step up my game.

Other than that, your style gibes wonderfully with Pratchett's (something i can't bring myself to do-to smutty for my own good), your sense of humour fits and i especially like the bit about the flyers and the evolution of Hanna/Havelock's feelings towards one another.

Vetinari is not a vampire, if that's what you're on about.

Fun _ Hanna is certainly an interesting character - And who doesn't love Vetinari?

Vetinari in mirrored shades; truly a terrifying and exhilarating prospect... marvelously done.

At first, I thought it would almost be a crime to match the Patrician up with a seamstress... but you have made it work! I first read Say Yes and now this story, and they're both really good. You're a great author!

Brilliant, no time for more , sorry

Loved it.

I can't describe how much i enjoyed this. Once again, this has made my day.

*laughs* Very well done!

Even showing a lighter side of Vetinari, you managed to keep him in character-quite a feat in and of itself-as well as having created entertaining original characters. Hanna is a very good match for Havelock.

Altogether, a beautiful job. :)

Ah, brilliant! It's all been sorted.

So Fillwater planned this all along, the little creep. Aggravating events to develop into a revolution, just so he can corner the beer market. Git. I think he got of lightly, really. Stay in Pseudopolis, lad. You'll live longer.

Vetinari has "slightly sharpened incisors"? Oh, blimey. As if he wasn't scarey enough...

The Patrician's explanation about "Controlled Revolutions" was brilliant - I love the way he gets people to do what he wants, even as they think it's their own idea. Your version of Vetinari is spot on!

Hanna dealing with the elders was interesting. Given the above, I wonder if this was what they discussed during Havelocks version of "pillow talk". Hanna knowing about the trade routes through the city that the Ansbachers rely on suggests it.

And all the little throwaway comments - Beezle punching someone out, the Ansbach version of Dibbler. And Lotte! She seems a formidable woman - giving Havelock a friendly slap on the back, hard enough to leave a bruise! And she's still alive. And she gets Fillwater's brewery!

The dartboard with Rust's picture on it (and knife marks!). I think this is why Vetinari manages to keep calm when dealing with the little twerp. Even he would have trouble keeping his temper with bloody Rust!

And of course, Hanna's prezzie. Smoke and mirrors. Spot on!

Fantastic! Enjoy your holiday, Mercator, you definately deserve it!

lol I'm loving this. You have such a great style and are always able to keep me reading - you even introduce a whole platoon of new characters and make them both believable and interesting.

*grins* loved Rosie Palm in this, loved confrontational Vimes, not so sure about Vetinari taking a back seat again. How will you save him? (WILL you save him?) Two favourite quotes:

' “It has been said in other quarters, Rosemary, that I am a foolish old man dazzled by the mistress I’ve bought,” he said. “That is only half true.” '

'We hold these truths to be pretty reasonable if you think about it: that all people regardless of their ability to pronounce the letter “w” are created equal; that they are endowed by the Gods with certain rights, that among these are life, liberty and the pursuit of beer brewed to the Ansbach Purity Law of the Year of the Distressed Wombat…'

Keep on writing!

Meh! Major meh! Meh in a really big way! This does not make me happy! Where are you going with this? Why must you torture poor Havelock . . . ?

Seriously though, it's brilliant, as always. Am loving this fic in unhealthy ways. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Just when I think this story can't get any better, it does!

I can't wait for the next part to show up. You've definitely got me hooked!

I've just caught up with "Say Yes" and this story, and I have to say...

*starts banging tankard on table*

MORE! MORE! MORE! MORE! WHAT ARE YOU DOING STOPPING -NOW-? *whipcrack* Write!

;) Tee-hee.

Great writing, great Vetinari, and great to see, as a reviewer further down said, the ol' iceberg Havelock starting to thaw. I've always loved the character, and you do him justice.

Keep it up. The suspense is killing me. :)

I wonder how Vetinari will pull these strings around?

Good job. :)