Dude, this REEKS! No depth, man, no depth. No wonder you put writing this thing off. Try writing something BETTER!

Okay.

So, got any logical explanations for why any of the following actions didn't happen?

1. Given that the teacher knows, why didn't she inform the police and/or the Japanese version of Child Protective Services of what was going on? Since underage prostitution is a SERIOUS crime, and knowing and not reporting it makes her an accessory to the fact.

2. How can everyone else have known and Takato NOT known? Do they care so little for him and his feelings they'd just ignore the whole situation and lie to him?

3. Why would her dad suddenly become 'powerhungry' and why would making her do this satisfy it in any way? Do you even know what 'powerhungry' actually IS?

4. If Juri suddenly has the spine to do this NOW, why didn't she have it before?

5. How is this any different from your bland, typical fic where the poor girl gets trapped in a bad situation and has to wait for Prince Charming to come save her?

6. Where is the emotional damage? The PHYSICAL damage of this situation? How old is she in the first place? This isn't even a real first chapter, this is a sketchy outline.

Please try again.