Reviews for Misplaced Writings

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nibel der lizard 2008-01-08 ch 4,	abuseThe poem and story are nice. Some are sad, like the first and second custom character poem. Almost feel her pain, although I never exprience myself... Ramza/Agrias story really make me smile. Feel warming :) More poems please!
2sidez-Samecoin 2006-02-20 ch 4,	abuseI enjoyed reading your work. They stirred my emotions. I liked the story 'One Cold Night' and the short fight. It was funny, and the scene between Ramza and Agrias was warming.
Princess Marlo 2005-02-28 ch 4,	abuseMORE POEMS by the way GREAT JOB!!
ObviousMan 2005-02-21 ch 4,	abuseWow again. I've never even played FFTactics and I like this. Why do you have to be so damn good at poetry? ! Not fair; I'm jealous. sulks Just kidding. This is still nice; I'm just kidding about the angry/sulky part. This is really good. Write some more poetry! ¿ObviousMan?
Kitten Kisses 2005-01-28 ch 1,	abuseHello! I don't know anything about FFTA, unfortunately, but I decided to read a poem. This one was very long! ^_^ Long is good. And I liked it. A lot. Really, the flow of the words was beautiful. And, personally, I love freeverse. I'll try to read the others' when I get a chance. ^^ Also, I wanted to know if you could email me. =) You didn't list an email in your bio, so I can't get a hold of you. =( I wanted to comment on all your reviews to my stories. ^_^ Much love, -KK
Anonymous 2003-12-13 ch 1, anon.	abuseWow! That was really beautiful. I especially like the one during the Sweegy Woods ambush. It really touched me. Hope you could write more of these. I'll be waiting.
Harvey Bautista 2003-12-13 ch 4,	abuseThis covers all three of the 'chapters' posted thus far: In terms of poetry, your collection is strong. Basic, easy-to-understand, and there's little room for confusion as to what you mean. I'm jealous. Especially of the Alma piece. The emotions are something that I can grasp, and that's nice to read. Simplicity rocks. Its when you get into the short stories that I see you having problems. The characters seem juvenile. Battles harden and transform a person. These characters seem like kids playing around: they are irresponsible and reckless. To be frank: they seem clumsily-characterized. In terms of emotions and some abstract notions (love, loyalty, anguish, etc.) your writing (poetry) is strong, but once you get to actual dialogue and body text (stories), you suffer. With the first ACC female, yeah, ACCs (even if they were in your party in the game) have never attracted my sympathy. If anything, I'm a little ** at Ramza. No one could've been that dense. As a leader, he was irresponsible (for broaching something near a romance with a subordinate and for letting one of his people fall that far into the abyss). As to Agrias. I am so tempted to like this version of her, but something keeps me. I think its because its everything we want to hear from the girls we're attracted to. Its as if she's forcefully kept dense. Being in denial is one thing, but being this thick is another. Take this review for what it is: the thoughts and opinions of another, not established facts. There should be something that you can find from it that you might have thought about or never even considered. I'm not saying you see the characters in the wrong way, but you are struggling with keeping them believable. In a nutshell: You're a better poet than you are a novelist. Updated Review: (Concerning your fourth 'chapter') First off: Be careful. The fanfiction.net admins may not like you posting what are essentially duplicate copies of the same pieces. I think they'll classify it as a violation of the ToS (or some other regulations). You asked me to focus on this short story specifically... okay. Hm, I can't really say much except that I think that this/these scene/s with Ovelia and Delita is/are a bit on the confusing side. I saw a problem with Delita mentioning his mission (at some point it had to have been pre-medidated) of 'reforming' Ivalice (the other plot that ran in the game) directly to Ovelia even though it hasn't been mentioned in the text that she knows what he plans to do with her (a plot to maneuver Ivalice into Civil War and assassinate one's liege lord in order to rise to power isn't exactly something that you would share to someone as compromised as a political prisoner). I think Delita either stupid or having ulterior motives. Meaning, I'm implying that this Delita seems to be manipulating the prisoner (I forgot the name... Stockholm Syndrome?) into seeing him as their salvation, their only friend in captivity. It doesn't go on long enough for me to form any other strong conclusions. Also, minor point: Delita would've been much more formal. Granted he punched her out back in Orbonne, but that was to capture her. P.S. Review System, message board... same difference. In case you were wondering, I have updated Scene 10. It isn't complete yet, and its annoying that ff.net isn't allowing it to be shown as an update. Its going to be a week or so until that scene is completed.
The highwaywoman 2003-12-03 ch 1, anon.	abuseSniff, sniff...I love your poems ~_~ There so touching! Please write more! And more short stories too!
Amazed 2003-11-17 ch 1, anon.	abuseAll I can say is WOW! Your poems and short stories are truly one-of-a-kind. And "Impressed" is right. Anyone who doesn't read this doesn't know what they're missing!^_^
Impressed 2003-11-13 ch 1, anon.	abuseWow, your stories are really something. I can't believe you've only got a few reviews. For shame! you people don't know what you're missing!^v^
Gabrielle 2003-11-13 ch 2, anon.	abuseThanks a lot for the reviews! I hope I can give you some inspiration. In answer to your question, I've decided to portray Ovelia as this sweet, charming, and seductive type of girl, just to make my stories more interesting. Its too bad she's so comely in the game. :( And yes, I'll write more on my favorite FFT couples.^_^ You can count on that! And in answer to your last question, I have played Xenogears but I only played it once because I borrowed it. So I don't remember enough to write any fics on it. :(
Gabrielle3 2003-11-10 ch 2,	abuseHeh...your stories keep getting better and better. I'd recommend them to anyone. Anyway, if you need some ideas, check out some of my FFT romances.^_~
Gabrielle 2003-10-16 ch 2, anon.	abuseIts really good. Please continue, its been a while.
Brutal2003 2003-09-01 ch 2, anon.	abuseI usally don't like poems and short storys, but yours was really good you should be proud.
yosh 2003-09-01 ch 1, anon.	abusegreat I like it I see youre tryin to go somewhere with it, please do I enjoy ramza x Agrias

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