Did I just say conclusion? Oi. Shows you how much I was paying attention! Anyway, this chapter finishes the rare GOOD introspective story. Normally, I dislike 'reflective' pieces (of which there are far too many in fandom) because what so many authors think is original is usually trite. You manage to write rings around those authors, and I appreciate that.

A fine conclusion to the story. Succinct and introspective, and still powerful.

I really wish other writers had your knack for doing passionate scenes. It's so hard to find good love scenes in this fandom, and you successfully packed a lot of emotion into just a few, powerful lines.

Very subtle writing in this chapter, with a good treatment of atmosphere.

Unusual, poetic treatment. I'm not a big fan of present-tense stories, but this is very good.

There is such brilliant melody in your writing, its so fluid and sensitive, with the sort of sentances that you want to quote.


Brilliant... such a subtle and quiet way of expressing the character and language.


Thank-you.

Wow...this was incredible. I loved the way it started and ended on similar notes. A truly beautiful story that actually kept them in character and showed their emotions well. It was an interesting concept to have no speech, and you pulled it off very well.
Lovely work.
Cobalt