I laughed, I cried, I bought the novelization. Well bloody done.

Just what I needed to read... It's wierd and cool and theatrical all at the same time... Like the AYB song. If you haven't already, I think you should check out on Newgrounds, because this fic really reminded me of it. (Or maybe I'm just being AYB-obsesed today)

That's deep... O_O
I give you a lot of credit for taking this dramatic sequence and giving it the credit and the feeling it deserves (and not laughing at the poorly translated text)
It is well written has a lot of feeling. Your just missing some of the scene.